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Mulberry Kimono

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Fuji
Fuji(@fuji)
2 years ago

Andrew, this is a truly lovely haiku. It reminds me of what Basho said about “becoming the thing” you are writing about. The reader seems to be transported to a different world, where s/he can contemplate the dressmaker, the mulberry leaf and the silkworm – and therefore the Universe. Thank you for a wonderful start to my day.

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Fuji(@fuji)
Reply to  Andrew Carter
2 years ago

Andrew, thank you so much for this haiku series. These verses contain a beautiful message. We will all miss you! Don’t be a stranger – hope you will return to Voice.club when you can.

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Juma
Juma(@juma)
1 year ago

I think this is one of the best haiku on this site, Andrew. I can’t get it out of my mind. What was your source of inspiration?

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Juma(@juma)
Reply to  Andrew Carter
1 year ago

The background you described is just as fascinating as the haiku itself! You raise silkworms? In Australia? And now you’re eating mulberries from your own trees? What a wonderful garden you must have.

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Culture Dragon
Culture Dragon(@culture-dragon)
Reply to  Andrew Carter
1 year ago

Hi Andrew – Happy New Year! You mentioned above “There should be a hyphen after the word ‘kimono’ but I may have forgotten it”. Actually, I may have missed the hyphen during my scribe recording. I agree with Juma, Mulberry Kimono is really such a great Haiku, it deserves to be perfected!

I would like to practice writing this out more, and when time allows, try to record a new version. Are there any other minor changes to correct on your above Haiku?

Best wishes to you and yours, and good luck in the new year 🙂
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Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe(@eric-radcliffe)
1 year ago

Hello Andrew, listening to the words in your Haiku, expresses how we connect to each other. I hear this is in the comment written below, and see in my mind, little bridges that form from image to the other.

Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe(@eric-radcliffe)
Reply to  Andrew Carter
1 year ago

it is nice to meet you Andrew, let your writing and poetry do the communicating for you, because that is who you are, they are you,. In life, simplicity works the miracles. You only have to read the replies you receive to know that you have made the connection. This site is like a comfy chair, just sit back and enjoy.

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Reply to  Andrew Carter
1 year ago

Hi Andrew and Avatar Eric Radcliffe – we noticed Andrew’s comment about unwanted question marks sometimes appearing instead of emojis. We cleaned up the comment you mentioned, and we are looking into why emojis appear differently on different browsers. Please do not hesitate to post and we will make sure your comments always look good.

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