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Mulberry Kimono

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Fuji
Fuji (@fuji)
8 months ago

Andrew, this is a truly lovely haiku. It reminds me of what Basho said about “becoming the thing” you are writing about. The reader seems to be transported to a different world, where s/he can contemplate the dressmaker, the mulberry leaf and the silkworm – and therefore the Universe. Thank you for a wonderful start to my day.

Fuji
Fuji (@fuji)
8 months ago
Reply to  Andrew Carter

Andrew, thank you so much for this haiku series. These verses contain a beautiful message. We will all miss you! Don’t be a stranger – hope you will return to Voice.club when you can.

Juma
Juma (@juma)
6 months ago

I think this is one of the best haiku on this site, Andrew. I can’t get it out of my mind. What was your source of inspiration?

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Juma
Juma (@juma)
6 months ago
Reply to  Andrew Carter

The background you described is just as fascinating as the haiku itself! You raise silkworms? In Australia? And now you’re eating mulberries from your own trees? What a wonderful garden you must have.

Culture Dragon
Culture Dragon (@culture-dragon)
6 months ago
Reply to  Andrew Carter

Hi Andrew – Happy New Year! You mentioned above “There should be a hyphen after the word ‘kimono’ but I may have forgotten it”. Actually, I may have missed the hyphen during my scribe recording. I agree with Juma, Mulberry Kimono is really such a great Haiku, it deserves to be perfected!

I would like to practice writing this out more, and when time allows, try to record a new version. Are there any other minor changes to correct on your above Haiku?

Best wishes to you and yours, and good luck in the new year 🙂
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Eric Radcliffe (@eric-radcliffe)
6 months ago

Hello Andrew, listening to the words in your Haiku, expresses how we connect to each other. I hear this is in the comment written below, and see in my mind, little bridges that form from image to the other.

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Eric Radcliffe (@eric-radcliffe)
6 months ago
Reply to  Andrew Carter

it is nice to meet you Andrew, let your writing and poetry do the communicating for you, because that is who you are, they are you,. In life, simplicity works the miracles. You only have to read the replies you receive to know that you have made the connection. This site is like a comfy chair, just sit back and enjoy.

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6 months ago
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