Winter With the Five Senses
See the Winter breeze
Harshly blanketing the grass.
Blades frozen stiffly.
The wonder unpleasant and immense.
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Hear the Winter wind howling
Its songs musically cacophonic.
The raucous tunes unnerving
And to the ears a burden.
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Feel the biting fluffy snow
Resting in the garden.
Color erased by frigid flakes
Crunching forward in heavy boots.
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Smell the wood of bitterness
As you walk through the frostwork.
The fragile trees and shrubs
A scent of regret and melancholy.
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Taste the chestnuts of the Christmases
And the sour of cranberry sauce.
Things that still make you happy
Inside this gloomy, leaden Winter season.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleBrava, Melissa. Your poem is the first original poem posted on Voice.club!
Very nice work 😀
I’m so happy! I have written no new poems in many years. I was also unsure of the punctuation rules. I’m glad I sent it along!
I thought your poem was really good, Melissa. I especially liked all the references to cold – a nice change from the searing summer we’re having so far. I hope you’ll write more poetry – it’s a beautiful art form.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you for your comment, Fuji. Writing a poem is something that I have not done in many years. I’m glad all worked out!
I’m also glad you sent your poem along, Melissa. I do love poetry, and yours was lovely. I’m a fan of poems that don’t try to rhyme, but instead look at life in a poetic way, and play with the rhythm and sounds of individual words and phrases. I think, in general, the same punctuation rules apply to poems as to prose, but there is something called “enjambment” and differing line lengths… Read more »
Thank you for the link, and sharing all this info with me, Julie! You mention punctuation. I was worried if I got it right or not. I find it to be quite tricky!
I am happy that you want to get back into poetry. I would love to read some of yours as well!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleIt was indeed very lovely. I am glad you shared it here. And I also wish to learn doing poems from you. Nicely done, Melissa.
Thank you, Lotchie. I would love to read one of your poems someday!
You have captured the bitterness of winter through the five senses. Congratulations on your poem, Melissa.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you, Margarida. I appreciate your comment!
Lovely poem, Melissa. It feels like winter here right now, so I can certainly feel your winter’s chill. Much different here to the rest of Europe. A really enjoyable read.
Thank you, Carrie. Is it very hot there? I’ve read much of Europe is under a heat wave . I don’t like it too cold any more than too hot!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleSome parts of Europe have been hitting 50°C, think our maximum in over a week has been 17°C. The added wind and rain have made it feel like a mild winter’s day. I’m back in my winter woollies 😂. I hate hot weather, but I really don’t like feeling cold either!
Wow, Carrie – do you have an empty guest room? Our heat index right now is 115 degrees Fahrenheit – I don’t know Celsius degrees, but it’s really really really hot. Can I come visit you?
Put it this way, it’s colder here right now than the temperature of my car’s air conditioning. My feet were so cold last night that I couldn’t sleep! I certainly wouldn’t cope with the temperatures in the rest of Europe right now. These wildfires are horrendous!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleMelissa, this poem speaks to me. I imagine being in that ‘winter setting’. I grew up with snow. The beauty of a fresh snow is dynamic. A walk through a crunchy snow can invoke a melancholy reaction. As usual, great writing!
Thank you, Deborah! I grew up with plenty of snow myself. It always makes me feel downtrodden when winter creeps in!
I love this poem, which in an almost magical way brought back the sensations of winter to me. (It was 10 years ago now that I left winters behind.)
I appreciate the way you use beautiful, poetic descriptions to express resentment to harsh winters. The surprising turns are very well crafted and make your poem come to life and make a deep impression.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you! Just trying to get back into the swing of writing poems. I appreciate your comments; they mean a lot to me.
Who would think there is anything to write about in the dead of winter but you captured all the senses and more in your lovely poem! Love the ending with colorful cranberry and warmly toasted chestnuts of Christmas to cheer the cold, stark season of rest before renewal again in Spring!
It took me some time while writing this to come up with something ‘colorful’ when I thought about wintertime! I agree and appreciate your comment.
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