The tail flips, the ears prick, the whiskers twitch,
The proud nose black as the hat of a witch,
She prowls.

The tortoiseshell body slinks low to the ground,
The paws in the grass make nary a sound,
She growls.

The eyes on the prey, she never will quit,
The green eyes narrowed to the thinnest slit,
She scowls.

A shiver of leaves that shows her intent,
As she sneaks closer, closer, her nose on the scent,
She yowls.

A wiggle of bottom and she braces to leap,
She jumps and she misses and lands in a heap.
She howls.

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    Margarida Brei
    Margarida Brei(@margarida-brei)
    1 month ago

    I really like the way that you kept the same rhyme in the third line. You have cleverly summarised how a cat hunts.

    Linda Rock
    Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
    1 month ago

    I could just imagine watching this in animation, Carrie! Loved it!

    1 month ago

    Carrie, this poem is fabulous! As a cat owner or rather the slave of several cats, I thought I was reading about one of mine! She’s a wannabe warrior often acting out a fierce attack, but really afraid of every dust mote and blade of grass that quivers in a slight wind. I love the rhyming scheme of this poem, including the wonderful words that use similar vowel sounds, creating a sort… Read more »

    1 month ago

    Fabulous poem Carrie. Having been owned by cats for most of my life, you have really captured the cat on the prowl. I always loved the little bottom wiggle before they pounce.
    I really like the rhythm and rhyming scheme of this poem, Each stanza feels like a prowl with the first two lines longer and sinuous before the pounce of each third line.

    Julie Harris
    Julie Harris(@julie-harris)
    1 month ago

    Delightful poem, Carrie! You’ve captured “catness” perfectly.

    Lotchie Carmelo
    Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
    1 month ago

    She prowls. She growls. She scowls. She yowls. She howls. Your poem shows some cat cuteness overload. Nicely done, Carrie.

    Lotchie Carmelo
    Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
    Reply to  Carrie OLeary
    1 month ago

    You’re always welcome.

    Christer Norrlof
    Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
    30 days ago

    What a wonderful verbal portrait of your cat, Carrie! It’s well built up with the rhyming structure and fun to read.

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