A Special Treat
The manor sat at the edge of the small town, where the wind whispered forgotten secrets to the leaves, and the chilly air felt like a freezing hand on the neck. Anxious mothers frequently told sleepy children that a wicked witch lived within the cemented walls. The shadow of death and loss lurked at the porch, discouraging wayward children from knocking for treats.
She would never have gone there if her ears hadn’t been ringing from the slap. “Get out of here! Don’t you dare come back to this place!” But her starving stomach redirected her steps from the threshold of the orphanage to the cobbled streets. When the smell of hot chocolate wafted through the air, she found herself turning automatically to the mansion. She told herself that it was the ghost of Halloween that made her step to the door, press the doorbell gently, and look expectantly at the old witch.
“Come to trick or treat, my dear? Such a realistic homeless beggar!” A bag of candies trembled as the witch fumbled through it. She found a heart-shaped candy with an emaciated wrapper and pushed it through the girl’s mouth.
The sugar burned through her veins, scorching her throat and constricting her words into unintelligible sounds. Her fingers grasped weakly at the rotting wood of the threshold, her knees twisting into an impossible angle to keep her from collapsing. Even when something twisted in her stomach, she welcomed the pain more than the hunger.
“Murderer,” she whispered weakly to the witch, unable to meet her unnerving gaze.
“Accurately guessed.” The witch grinned, handing her another candy to taste.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleI like the build up at the beginning Pragya. I’m glad I won’t be trick or treating. A lovely write.
Thank you very much, Eric. I’m elated that you liked it 🙂
Amazing build up with a tense atmosphere. I loved your descriptions.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you very much, Genya. I’m glad you liked it 🙂
You don’t pull your punches with this one! All these murderous souls in this month’s shortlist,
Thank you very much, Susan 🙂
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleAnother very sinister tale. The descriptions in your first paragraph build up nicely to the rest of your story.
That means a lot coming from you, Carrie 🙂
“She welcomed the pain more than the hunger” definitely pulls at the heartstrings.
A darkly wonderful piece!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you very much, Emily. I’m so happy you liked it.
Congratulations. Very well done.
Once again, thanks a ton, Carrie! That means a lot from you.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleReminds me of the haunting of hill house. love it Pragya!
Thank you tons, Nimra 🙂
Well done Pragya, I am happy for you. Well Written – Eric.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you so much, Eric! That honestly means a lot to me.
Well done on getting first place. It was a well written story.
Thank you very much, Inderjeet. It means a lot, more than I can express, that there are so many wonderful people on this platform intent on encouraging every author on here.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleI enjoyed reading your story, Praga. You have a talent with words and the story gives a very genuine experience, like reading an old fashioned fairy tale. Congratulations to your prize!
Thank you very much, Christer! That was precisely what I was going for 😀
Congratulations, Pragya! You wrote a really scary piece, very fitting for Halloween.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you so much, Katy! 🙂
Congratulations, Pragya on your win. I enjoyed reading it. It was really scary. Hope to read more from you.
Thank you very much, Lotchie.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleYou’re welcome.