Three trick or treat witches, exploding with excitement, ran to the enormous creepy cottage standing solitaire and situated at the end of the cul-de-sac.

As they careered closer, a coinciding luminous light leapt out from the cottage’s stained glass window. The children carefully crept up the rickety, rackety ragged wooden porch steps. The steps cowered and creaked under their feet, seemingly forewarning the three friends not to go up.

“I’m scared, so let’s skip this creepy cottage,” whispered Jenny.

“Cluck, cluck, cluck,” teased Jackie. Then, she sprinted up the stairs and knocked at the door.

Instantly, a scrawny, spindly silhouette appeared on the door followed by faint footsteps. As the door opened slowly, a musty malodour drifted out filling Jackie’s nostrils. Her heart began hammering in her chest as she gazed up at the tall man dressed in a black suit standing in the doorway. A bleak, blowy breeze sent shivers down her spine.

“Um trick or treat?” tittered Jackie.

“I’ve never had trick or treaters till now; you’re very valiant vitches coming here alone. Vait here.” The man disappeared into the creepy cottage and returned with a prism placed on his palm. He put the prism into Jackie’s pouch and silently shut the sinister door.

“That wasn’t too scary,” said Jackie, as she strolled swiftly to her friends.

At Helen’s house, they poured their pouches onto a plate and started sucking the sweets. As soon as Penny grasped the pearly, purple prism in her hand it began to gleam, glint and glow. Suddenly, they heard a strange sound, “Whoowooowoo! Whoowooowoo!”. Ghosts flew and floated through the doors and walls. Penny put the prism down hastily, but the crystal continued to coruscate.

The ghosts transmigrated the toys. Barbies, balls and bears surrounded the screaming girls. The circle commenced contraction and the toys got closer. Helen’s Mum hurried in, however the toys encircled her also.

Shortly, scratching noises started; then the door swung open. The man in the black suit stood smirking in the doorway. He strode in, picked up the purple prism and exited. Barbies, balls and bears followed him.

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2 years ago

On first reading, we were struck by how much fun the writer was having with words! The wonderful alliterations are everywhere and almost made us laugh out loud with pure enjoyment. This is a writer who values the written word. We look for great things from this young author in the future! The hand-drawn picture was also charming, and a big plus in the selection process.

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Genya Johnson
Genya Johnson(@genya-johnson)
2 years ago

Scary and creepy. Those poor children got more than they bargained for. At least he came back. Shame he took the toys with him. Great story.

Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
2 years ago

Wow, I’m just imagining all those toys floating around. Scary stuff! Enjoyed your story Inderjeet.

Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe(@eric-radcliffe)
2 years ago

Hello Inderjeet, I think your story is the only one that has a wicked man in it. I enjoyed the spooky prism idea. Nice write and read.

Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
2 years ago

What a wonderful, rhythmical and poetic language, Inderjeet! I love all your incredible alliterations, which give the magical story an extra dimension. Great job!

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
2 years ago

What an interesting story Inderjeet. It begs the question of what the man in the black suit wants all the toys for!

Sandra James
Sandra James(@sandra-james)
2 years ago

A great surprise ending, Inderjeet! Scary but also made me laugh at the thought of all the toys following the man in the black suit. I, too, loved the alliteration – it really added to the wonderful rhythm. 🙂

Katy Bizi
Katy Bizi(@katy-bizi)
2 years ago

Wow, what a turn of events! I definitely didn’t expect this ending. I think I might scream a little the next time I see a black-suited man.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 year ago

I was scared but at the same time having fun. The ending is unexpected, which makes me feel amazed. From now on, I will avoid the man in a black suit. Good job, Inderjeet.

Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse(@marianna-pieterse)
1 year ago

Inderjeet, at first I was on the edge of my seat. The part about the porch steps was so creepy. The ending had me laughing though. I expected something more sinister, instead he just came for the toys! Brilliant!

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