Invincible
“Walk faster, or we’ll miss it,” he whispered into the darkness. Calloused hands dragged me to the top of the cliff, the impending sunrise a deadline before our stumbling steps. We waited in the second before it happened, breaths mingling in the cold winter air, eyes struggling against icy winds and sleep, hearts dreading that this dawn would last forever, without the sun rising.
But the darkness softened and disappeared; red and golden flames danced around us, drowning us in light and turning us invincible.
Even in the moment before our feet led us off the cliff, my heart was sure: we had seen the rising sun that dawn. We would live forever.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleHello Pragya, short and to the point, no messing around here. I would have liked to understood a little more of who jumped, and why? Because I think that there is still a lot more to come from this story. Well done – Eric.
Thank you so much, Eric. I was thinking while writing that it would be better to explain a bit more, but then I decided to let the reader wonder. Your comment means a lot.
Even for a short story, this is quite short but that doesn’t mean it isn’t powerful. Nicely done, Pragya!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you very much, Katy 🙂
I love this story, Pragya. Not a single word wasted. Powerful. I think it’s perfect that we don’t know the who or the why. I hope someday you will record this one. I loved hearing you read Eric’s poem a while back. Keep writing!
Thank you very much, Fuji. Your comments always make me grin. They mean a lot coming from you. Thanks for reading and giving me such a lovely compliment 🙂
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleI love it, Pragya. It is powerful.
Thank you Lotchie. Your comments always mean a lot. I would really like it if you elaborated more, though, because it sounds really generic otherwise, and not specifically meant for my story, you know? Sometimes commenters on other websites post just for likes, and I really disapprove. The author should know that her/his story has been read. 🙂