She’s searching for a getaway from the morning light, the only source of her warmth. From the stifling night, worth another sad poem. From the pretty sun and the smiley moon, her loyal allies. From a million stars, staring from high above, the only audience she has. From all the good things that mean nothing in a story where she’s busy with the consequences, she’s not the cause.

Somebody asks her if it hurts so much then why do you keep running? If your feet bleed and your heart aches and your bones break, why do you keep running? If this road will never take you to the other side, if you won’t ever depart and what you escape is stitched to your fate, branded in your soul, everyone can see it in your eyes… Tell me, why do you keep running? Just to end up from where you began, but even more tired, yet you keep running.

She’s vigorous in making an ugly tale pretty, but no matter what, the plot never works out in her favor. The chapters are long and exhausting. Some page is plagiarized from the first chapters and it goes on again. To make up a happy ending is what she can’t do, to end with those three cliché words written in cursive at the end of every classic movie is what she cannot do. You see, the antagonist is the story itself, she becomes her worst enemy sometimes. Her sadness breaks hearts, her fears lead her, her thoughts eat her bit by bit her but she lives. Nothing makes sense in it and she can’t end this book.

What if she is forlorn, and runs away again? A getaway from all of the characters more tired of her and leave the pages blank then slip like a drop of ink. She’s good at it, the only thing she’s good at, running, and perhaps it’ll lead her to another embodiment.

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Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe(@eric-radcliffe)
1 year ago

Phew! Samman, where do I begin? I’m caught up in this writer struggle, and what a struggle it is. But does it have to be a happy ending?

Katy Bizi
Katy Bizi(@katy-bizi)
1 year ago

Your comment, Samman, is the perfect conclusion to the story. No one other than the writer could have said it better!

Katy Bizi
Katy Bizi(@katy-bizi)
1 year ago

You’re very welcome, Samman!

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Sandra James
Sandra James(@sandra-james)
1 year ago

I could feel this writer’s conflict, Samman. As one who has at least four uncompleted novels on the back-burner that could, and should, be finished, I know how much easier it is to run and start something new and exciting instead of putting in the hard yards to finish them. I think I will use your story as my inspiration to go back and finish at least one before the year is out 🙂

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
1 year ago

I think we all have this battle raging inside. I have several WIP, and the characters from all of them always come whispering in my ear in the middle of the night. I have to get up and write down the story that they’re telling me. I know that, if I go to sleep, it’ll be gone in the morning. I think my biggest failing is rewriting the first few chapters, time and time again, instead of moving forward, so my problem is more a case of halting than running ?

Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse(@marianna-pieterse)
1 year ago

Samman, I can definitely understand your protagonist’s struggle. I have started a few stories only to get to chapter three or four and then to decide it is not working as it should. I usually try editing what I have written so far, but struggle to get past it. What will usually happen is I will give up on the idea and start something else. The frustration is real. The tension and anticipation in your story is evident. I enjoyed reading this.

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Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse(@marianna-pieterse)
1 year ago

Thank you very much, Samman. I appreciate your kind words. Best wishes to you too! I look forward to reading more of your stories.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 year ago

The struggle to escape is exceptional. The title fits the content. I love it. Such a wonderful story that inspires the reader.

Dipayan Chakrabarti
Dipayan Chakrabarti(@dipayan-chakrabarti)
1 year ago

The activity of avoiding reality artfully expressed through psychoanalysis.

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