The Choice
Three boxes. My choice: cardboard, tin or gold.
The studio audience scream out their advice, words that bounce around the auditorium, indistinguishable in the cacophony of sound. I read their thoughts as they dip into their meagre reserve of Shakespearean quotes. ‘All that glistens…’
Deafening me to the prattle of the host, the phrase reverberates inside me, ‘All that glistens is not…’. The sound engineer embellishes the denouement with dramatic music, as I step forward to claim my moment in the spotlight.
My hand trembles as it reaches out and points to the golden box. The room falls silent.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleA tension-filled story told well. Wonderful use of the hundred word limit!
What an exciting story, Susan! You packed a lot of energy into a very few words, thus inspiring us all. You even managed to work in a bit of Shakespeare. Great work!
Thank you. Hard to get the head round the idea of telling a story in few words.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleYou seem to have mastered this new art form on the first try. Your writing feels effortless, as if you had written hundreds of 100 word stories!
Well thank you. It was one of those welcome ideas that formed while washing the breakfast pots.
I think everyone who enters the 100 word contest will all be saying the same thing Susan. I enjoyed your story too, you captured the tension of the game show beautifully, I’d love to know what was in the box? (you can whisper if you like)
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I love a cliffhanger Susan! So many sounds come through in your story that really bring it to life and the excitement is palpable. I felt I was actually there.
I think we all want to know, what happens next? Nice description of a game show situation.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleIn spite of the small format, you manage to build up tension in your story, Susan. Even more so at the end when the protagonist, as opposed to all advice, goes for the golden box. Exciting!
I love the expression ‘their meagre reserve of Shakespearean quotes’!
I thought about the Magi’s gifts and wondered if the gold box was the right one for that particular person at that exact time… A shiver of suspense in 100 words, loved it!!
That gives us food for thought, Greene.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleWhat an ending! And I certainly love how you fitted Shakespearean quotes in this extraordinarily short story. Nicely done, Susan!
Ha ha. There’s always a danger I’ll not be able to write longer ones now.
I have no doubt you’ll be able to write as long as you’d like, Susan. You’ve proved to us that you’re indeed capable of doing so!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleHello, Susan. This story is so exciting. I enjoyed it so much.