The wind cuts through the holes in my blanket.  I think about life, how it changes in an instant – no apology – no reason given!

Almost a year now – chink of a coin tossed, not enough for a soup.

Of those who pass by – the smell of the polished shoe, the well to do –  old tired feet that shuffle – busy feet that race –  those without work have no pace.

Bless you Sir! I feel the warmth of a loving word, the golden touch of humanity. It fills me with life, and courage to go on.

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Voice-Team
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1 year ago

An important story at any time, but particularly appropriate for today. “Almost a year now …” A beautifully written story, perhaps more powerful for what it does not say. All of us can fill in the blanks, according to our own experiences. Great writing.

Susan Dawson
Susan Dawson(@susan-dawson)
1 year ago

One simple encounter described, but with room for a bit of back story.

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Fuji
Fuji(@fuji)
1 year ago

Eric, this story is exceptional, and your best so far in my opinion. Beautifully written, full of pathos and sensitivity, it shines with humanity. The paragraph about the people who walk by is brilliant and is sheer poetry. I can just imagine “the smell of the polished shoe” – that one phrase says so much. Congratulations on a superb piece of writing.

Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
1 year ago

This was heart wrenching Eric. How true how life can change in an instant. I love all the references to shoes which, of course, are predominantly in the eyeline of a homeless person living on the streets. So much said, in so few words. Really well written.

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Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
1 year ago

This is a wonderful story Eric, the descriptions perfect for the situation. Very nicely written.

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Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
1 year ago

This is how a 100 word story should be. So focused and so poetic, and also so full of compassion. Also, it was from a surprising angle that you looked at the theme, “Gold.”

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 year ago

A very simple yet very exceptional story. I love all your words for descriptions. Congratulations, Eric.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
Reply to  Eric Radcliffe
1 year ago

You’re welcome. Hope to read, enjoy and learn from you more.

Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse(@marianna-pieterse)
1 year ago

Eric, this was a moving story which reminded me of the song “Another Day in Paradise” by Phill Collins. It makes you look at a homeless person with a bit more compassion and less judgement. This was well told.

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Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse(@marianna-pieterse)
Reply to  Eric Radcliffe
1 year ago

I have encountered that too, Eric. It is lovely to think that other writers took the time to really ‘look’ at your story and interpret it in their own way.

Santina Forlenza
Santina Forlenza(@santina-forlenza)
1 year ago

Hi Eric, it’s amazing how unfortunate people can still feel and appreciate the ‘warmth of a loving world’ and ‘ the golden touch of humanity, ‘ as you nicely quoted. Sometimes, ‘busy feet’ ( as you quote) get too busy to appreciate how lucky they are. Thanks for this story. And congratulations.

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Juma
Juma(@juma)
1 year ago

Hello Eric. This story was my number one favorite in this contest. You’ve handled the subject with care and compassion, and somehow said so much in just 100 words. Congratulations for winning second place in the public voting. You deserved it!

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Juma
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Reply to  Eric Radcliffe
1 year ago

First of all, no I didn’t catch the anagram “Longed”. You are even more amazing than I thought!! I wonder if anyone caught that? You are one step ahead of all of us. Secondly I really like the competitions, mainly because they give me a goal and an end date to work toward. Before I started entering these competitions, I never wrote down anything, just kept my stories in my head. I like the pace – I know I don’t have to enter every contest, but somehow I always do, and there’s always a good prompt to think about. Last but not least, please don’t ever stop writing here! You are the heart and soul of this site. Thank you for being uniquely and wonderfully Eric.

Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
1 year ago

Your story was one of my favorites Eric. Congratulations, really pleased for you.

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Juma
Juma(@juma)
Reply to  Eric Radcliffe
1 year ago

Love it ??

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Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
1 year ago

Congratulations, Eric! A well deserved success.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 year ago

Yes, you made it to second place on public voting, Eric. My overflowing happiness for you. Congratulations on a well-deserved win.

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Katy Bizi
Katy Bizi(@katy-bizi)
1 year ago

Congratulations, Eric, for both placing second and for creating such a wonderful story!

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