You treated me to an evening of string quartets. The music was sublime, but I was only aware of you, sitting beside me. Your lily-of-the-valley scent, the soft glow of you dressed all in white, like a bride. If only I had reached for your hand…

After the concert we walked city streets shining with rain, your hair curling from the mist, the street lights framing you with golden halos. Heart of my heart, if only I had kissed you…

The next day, the bombs fell. Oh my dearest, if only I had told you how much I loved you…

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1 year ago

Such poignancy and yearning . . . We can smell her lily-of-the-valley scent, see her hair curling in the rain, feel his memories . . .

Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
1 year ago

How very sad Juma, so many if only’s. I’m sure we’ve all had these. Beautifully written and a love that shines through from beginning to end.

Katy Bizi
Katy Bizi(@katy-bizi)
1 year ago
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You are so right, Linda! The guilt and regret of an “if only” can be unbearable. That why we should try to live every day to the fullest and not let opportunities pass by. It’s certainly easier said than done but if we try maybe, just maybe, we may never feel the weight of “if only” on our chest.

Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe(@eric-radcliffe)
1 year ago

How sad Juma. Linda hit the nail on the head when she reminded us of the things we should have said and also done. Once passed – the moment has gone! Wonderfully expressed.

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Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
1 year ago

Such a sad story Juma, if only we could have second chances in life. As Linda said, the love really shines through. A lovely piece of writing.

Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
1 year ago

A very poetic and sensitively written piece, Juma. I love the way you get all senses expressed in the small format: sound, smell, and visual aspect. And sadly, the sense of touch is missing in the memory of the hero, which led to the tragedy that the hearts never joined. Very well written!

Katy Bizi
Katy Bizi(@katy-bizi)
1 year ago

Tears are running down my cheeks! As sorrowful as this story is, the saddest part is that this is a real life event.

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