He was gorgeous.  My local coffee shop had never been so busy; every table taken with love-struck girls… all thinking the same.  Not that the new barista appeared to notice.

Reluctantly, I returned my attention to my laptop.  My ‘mafia-themed’ novel wouldn’t write itself.  An hour, two latte’s, three paragraphs and countless ‘starry-eyed’ glances at the coffee counter later… I gave up.  My concentration was defeated by distraction.

“I’m on my break.”

I gazed up into the softest brown eyes, flecked with gold.  Every head spun in my direction.

“May I join you?”

It was an offer I couldn’t refuse…

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Fuji
Fuji (@fuji)
7 months ago

What fun, Linda! Where did you say the coffee shop was again? I might want to drop in!! By the way, I love how your last line ties in with the novel you’re writing. Great job, and a great read.

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary (@carrie-oleary)
7 months ago

Oh, I do like this Linda. You’ve really done the story justice in such few words. Excellent job.

Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe (@eric-radcliffe)
7 months ago

Well Linda, I like the contrast – from the underworld of gangsters, to flirting and? I also sense the mischief in your story. A lovely warm and feel good write. .

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
7 months ago

Honestly, you make my lips smile with a little spark in my eyes. Flirting. I love how you have done this story in just a few words. Good job.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
7 months ago
Reply to  Linda Rock

You’re most welcome. Hope to read more from you. It brings joy to my heart.

Genya Johnson
Genya Johnson (@genya-johnson)
7 months ago

Just what every coffee shop needs. If only I were forty years younger. Great story Linda.

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Danielle Burke
Danielle Burke (@danielle-burke)
7 months ago

“An hour, two latte’s, three paragraphs and countless ‘starry-eyed’ glances at the coffee counter later. . .” I love the numerical progression here, Linda. Your words allowed me to picture the image clearly, but also to feel the desperation of your character.

Fuji
Fuji (@fuji)
7 months ago
Reply to  Danielle Burke

Oh wow, Danielle! I’ve read this story a half dozen times and never even caught that wonderful “1, 2, 3” progression. I guess I was too star-struck by the barista himself! This is what I love about everyone’s comments – they give an even wider perspective into the story and often point out hidden treasures.

Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof (@christer-norrlof)
7 months ago

A beautifully pictured situation, Linda. Your story contains so much of human longing, hoping, envy, attempts to be strong – plus the elements of surprise, love, joy and surrender. And then we don’t have to be strong anymore, just follow the new path that opened up. I guess there wouldn’t be more than those three paragraphs written that day?

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Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof (@christer-norrlof)
7 months ago
Reply to  Linda Rock

You just made me watch the last 5 minutes of Casablanca on YouTube. I imagined that the line was one between Bogart and Ingrid Bergman, so I needed a reminder of what the famous last scene of the movie looks like. Don’t hesitate to come up with more movie quotes if they fit into your stories, Linda!

Greene M Wills
Greene M Wills (@greene-m-wills-2)
6 months ago

A fatal encounter, a coup de foudre in 100 words!! Loved it, Linda, loved it!

Katy Bizi
Katy Bizi (@katy-bizi)
6 months ago

Its was just an ordinary day for both of these two, but because of the barista’s courage to walk up to her and speak it might evolve into something truly beautiful. This could be the start of a great novel!

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Katy Bizi
Katy Bizi (@katy-bizi)
6 months ago
Reply to  Linda Rock

You are very welcome, Linda!

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