Commotion in the golden fields, migrant workers shouting.  Master’s calming everyone. I pause my chores to open the kitchen door. Young boy, my age, skin and bones.
“Saved your kitten.” He’s holding Shock.
“What’s your name?” “Seb.”
“Where’s your home?” “Don’t have one.”
I give him a plate of ham, cheese, sliced apples.  He devours it.
Foreman shouts, “Where’s that young’n?”  Seb scurries out.
Missus comes in. I tell her what happened. “Blessed boy. Hope you fed him?”  “Yes’m. He sure was hungry.”
“Me too.”  She smiles, invites me to sit. We munch on my freshly-baked bread together, like friends.
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2 years ago

You have me intrigued, Juma. It seems there might be more here than immediately meets the eye. I sense at least two subplots, maybe more. I need to sit on this one. Good job!

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
2 years ago

I’d love to see this story extended Juma, there feels so much more to it and the characters have me intrigued.

Last edited 2 years ago by Carrie OLeary
Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
2 years ago

Yes, I agree with Fuji, this story also intrigues me. But I love how the character shows kindness even to a stranger like Seb. I learn a lot while reading your short story, Juma.

Last edited 2 years ago by Lotchie Carmelo
Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe(@eric-radcliffe)
2 years ago

Yes I agree with Lotchie, Fuji and Carrie, it intrigues, there just seems to be more waiting to be written. But as Lotchie points out, it is the act of kindness that stands out.

Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
2 years ago

This seems to me like a scene from an intriguing and interesting movie, where you get to know the characters, feel for them and hope that they will be all right. Very nice job, Juma, to get us emotionally involved in such a small space! The love and care expressed between the characters is genuine.

Katy Bizi
Katy Bizi(@katy-bizi)
2 years ago

Such a sweet scene! I would have also loved to read this play in a longer story, one where the kids could have a lengthier conversation and perhaps a few descriptions in between the dialogue. But then I suppose it wouldn’t be called micro fiction, haha!

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