Commotion in the golden fields, migrant workers shouting.  Master’s calming everyone. I pause my chores to open the kitchen door. Young boy, my age, skin and bones.
 
“Saved your kitten.” He’s holding Shock.
 
“What’s your name?” “Seb.”
 
“Where’s your home?” “Don’t have one.”
 
I give him a plate of ham, cheese, sliced apples.  He devours it.
 
Foreman shouts, “Where’s that young’n?”  Seb scurries out.
 
Missus comes in. I tell her what happened. “Blessed boy. Hope you fed him?”  “Yes’m. He sure was hungry.”
 
“Me too.”  She smiles, invites me to sit. We munch on my freshly-baked bread together, like friends.
5 1 vote
Post Rating
Comments without a personalized avatar will not be published.
10 Comments
Oldest
Newest Most Voted
Inline Feedbacks
View all comments
Fuji
Fuji(@fuji)
1 year ago

You have me intrigued, Juma. It seems there might be more here than immediately meets the eye. I sense at least two subplots, maybe more. I need to sit on this one. Good job!

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
1 year ago

I’d love to see this story extended Juma, there feels so much more to it and the characters have me intrigued.

Last edited 1 year ago by Carrie OLeary
Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 year ago

Yes, I agree with Fuji, this story also intrigues me. But I love how the character shows kindness even to a stranger like Seb. I learn a lot while reading your short story, Juma.

Last edited 1 year ago by Lotchie Carmelo
Comments without a personalized avatar will not be published.
Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe(@eric-radcliffe)
1 year ago

Yes I agree with Lotchie, Fuji and Carrie, it intrigues, there just seems to be more waiting to be written. But as Lotchie points out, it is the act of kindness that stands out.

Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
1 year ago

This seems to me like a scene from an intriguing and interesting movie, where you get to know the characters, feel for them and hope that they will be all right. Very nice job, Juma, to get us emotionally involved in such a small space! The love and care expressed between the characters is genuine.

Katy Bizi
Katy Bizi(@katy-bizi)
1 year ago

Such a sweet scene! I would have also loved to read this play in a longer story, one where the kids could have a lengthier conversation and perhaps a few descriptions in between the dialogue. But then I suppose it wouldn’t be called micro fiction, haha!

Comments without a personalized avatar will not be published.
Become a PatronHelp support our family-friendly mission

Most Voted Comments

Avatar
8

Bait

It takes a real talent to tell a story in so few words. What was…


Avatar
6

Endure and Sing

Inspirational piece. Am glad you picked the rat to be the protagonist in your story,…


Avatar
6

Endure and Sing

Such a sweet tale - and with a good moral to the story. I thought…


Avatar
5

Endure and Sing

Wow! This is a good story! Really good to read to little kids, the moral…


Avatar
4

Endure and Sing

Hi Katy, it really does add an extra dimension to hear your story read aloud…


Avatar
4

Endure and Sing

In my neighboring country Denmark, we have the classical storyteller Hans-Christian Andersen. Your sweet story…


Avatar
4

Endure and Sing

A really nice one with a wonderful story line. I can see why this was…


Avatar
4

Endure and Sing

A beautiful story! I was reminded of seeing Paul Potts and Susan Boyle on Britain's…


Avatar
4

Endure and Sing

Your story inspired me to keep going no matter how discouraging it gets. At times…


Avatar
4

Endure and Sing

Thank you so much for the feedback! I pray that the young readers will be…


Avatar
4

Endure and Sing

Thank you for taking the time to comment and convey your thoughts on the story.…


Avatar
4

Endure and Sing

Hi Katy, don't we all feel like the rat in your story at times! We…


Avatar
4

Vows

I must admit it was the picture of the church, with its grave yard, under…


Avatar
3

Between Belonging and Dying

A very powerful story, Daniel. Your writing makes it easy to feel the reality of…


Avatar
3

Between Belonging and Dying

Oh my gosh, Daniel. Your story really defines the word superb. You make me experience…


Avatar
3

Between Belonging and Dying

A horrendous situation, more so because so many people find themselves going through it. A…


Avatar
3

Between Belonging and Dying

What an extremely powerful story Daniel, really well written and with an ending that had…


Avatar
3

Between Belonging and Dying

Daniel, this story is one of the best flash fiction stories I've ever read. You…


Avatar
3

In Memoriam

It's terrible to lose someone you love and accept that he is not a part…


Avatar
3

The Problem with Women

I think Carrie has said it all. We rest our collective case.  ? 


Recent Comments



www.Voice.club

Upcoming Site
Maintenance
Scheduled for Today @ 21:15 ET

USA Timezone – Eastern Time – (GMT-5)

Days
Hours
Minutes
Seconds


Voice-Team will perform upgrades and add new features!

During our scheduled maintenance
Voice.club will be inaccessible

10
0
Selected Authors may submit comments (5 Credits)x
()
x
Scroll to Top

Sharing a Post

Why do my friends need to SignIn to read the post I shared?

Actually, this is a voting security feature. During public voting, only club members can read posts submitted for that contest. Since anyone reading the story is able to vote (click the Like button), we reserve these capabilities to members who SignIn. Before we implemented this security feature, people were voting multiple times and making the public voting process unfair and out of balance. To fix this, our staff finally decided to allow only members who SignIn to read the stories. Membership is free and easy, and ensures our club is safe, secure, and family-friendly!