She surveyed the cluttered room; the sunlight spilling dusty rays of light over shelves of books that lay haphazardly shoved into place and left unread for years. She instantly regretted agreeing to this meeting and fiddled impatiently with a loose thread on her jumper, counting the minutes until she could run outside and breathe again.

‘Why am I here?’ she repeated. He shuffled around slowly from behind his desk placing a lumpy brown paper package wrapped in gold ribbon in front of her. ‘All the answers are here,’ he replied with an old wheezy laugh. “You’ll see.’

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Fuji
Fuji (@fuji)
7 months ago

What an intriguing story, Lisa! From the elusive title to the lumpy brown package, the reader is pulled into a world of mystery, and like your protagonist, is full of questions. I love stories that don’t end – they stay in my mind for a long time, as I mull over possibilities. Great work!

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary (@carrie-oleary)
7 months ago

Interesting story Lisa. Can I ask the reason behind the title? It has me intrigued 🙂

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary (@carrie-oleary)
7 months ago
Reply to  Lisa Gledhill

Ah, I see. I’d love to see this extended, I think many possibilities await your protagonist 🙂

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Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof (@christer-norrlof)
7 months ago

A mysterious cliffhanger, wrapped up in brown paper and tied up with golden ribbon. Very well written, Lisa! Do you already know the answers that are to be revealed during the rest of the week?

Susan Dawson
Susan Dawson (@susan-dawson)
7 months ago

Wait til they announce the next micro fiction theme and write Tuesday to fit that theme, and so on. Dickens did well with serials.

Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe (@eric-radcliffe)
6 months ago

Your story tells us – not everything appears to be what it seems. The things we worry about are never as bad as first thought and of course not all surprises come gift wrapped in bright paper. I love this thought provoking write Lisa. I will look forward to your next story.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
6 months ago

So intriguing and fascinating. I am wondering what is inside the brown paper package wrapped with a golden ribbon. Hope it was a piece of good news like a promotion or more. So it might be a good Monday for your character.

Santina Forlenza
Santina Forlenza (@santina-forlenza)
6 months ago

Hi Lisa, I m so curious to know what is inside the package wrapped in gold 🙂 I m imagining a box of donuts. Perfect for a Monday morning. Thanks for this story!

Katy Bizi
Katy Bizi (@katy-bizi)
5 months ago

So mysterious! After reading the story, we are left with so many questions. I’m really glad that you’ve decided to write a sequel to this piece, Lisa; That way we won’t have to be left wanting more!

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