I submerge my pan in a Californian stream, sieving silt and stones for my haul of nuggets. In my scuba diving suit I plumb the depths of Lake Toplitz, daring to descend 300 feet to return with Nazi gold. I sail my galleon in Blackbeard’s Caribbean realm to dig up pirate treasure. Defying the Pharoah’s curse, I penetrate the pyramid’s defences to open the sarcophagus and reach the prize within. I am the conquistador that finds the legendary El Dorado.

But today, I clutch my newly-purchased lottery ticket, and hurry it home to its safe place on the mantelpiece.

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Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary (@carrie-oleary)
7 months ago

Yes, I was pillaging treasure from Viking era Colchester in the early hours of this morning. I’ve given up on the lottery though, so that’s as close to real treasure as I’ll ever get. Love the descriptions.

Fuji
Fuji (@fuji)
7 months ago

Wow, what a great story. I laughed out loud when I read the last line. Good use of 100 words, Susan. If your character has the luck of Christer’s “Lucky Swede”, s/he will win the lottery, then lose it all in a poker game or suchlike! Great image too, perfect for the “Gold” prompt!

Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof (@christer-norrlof)
7 months ago

I love your story, Susan, with the initial survey of gold hunting man all over the planet and all over history. When I came to the climax of the story, with your own, private treasure, I, like other readers, laughed out loud. You have a wonderful sense of humor!
I just also want to add that the part of El Dorado (Spanish for “the golden one”) has a special significance for me since I am now living in Colombia, where the stories about a country flooded with gold originated.

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Danielle Burke
Danielle Burke (@danielle-burke)
7 months ago

Susan, I love the imagery and the plunge back into the “real world” at the end. I really related to the daydreaming moments!

Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe (@eric-radcliffe)
6 months ago

I not only laughed at the end Carrie, but in your reply to Christer – that you had never dived 300 feet, or that you never do the lottery.

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Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe (@eric-radcliffe)
6 months ago
Reply to  Susan Dawson

You are so alike, ha,ha – as she is lovely too. (Did I get out unscathed)

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
6 months ago

I love it. I was interested in gold hunting too. I was amazed by the images you put in my mind as I read this story.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
6 months ago
Reply to  Susan Dawson

I am glad you share it here too. The stories here make me stress-free. Hope to read more from you, Susan.

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Santina Forlenza
Santina Forlenza (@santina-forlenza)
6 months ago

Hi Susan, I really jumped into your story ! Still diving into Lake Toplizt; looking for El Dorado. Thanks for your adventurous story. And congratulations.

Santina Forlenza
Santina Forlenza (@santina-forlenza)
6 months ago
Reply to  Susan Dawson

🙂 Met the Pharoah as well. Greetings from him to you, Susan. And thanks again for your story

Juma
Juma (@juma)
6 months ago

Susan, this little piece is a treasure! (No pun intended) From the wild adventures back to real life with a thud, you had me captivated for the entire journey. Congratulations on your winning 3rd place in public voting. We all have such good taste ?

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Juma
Juma (@juma)
6 months ago
Reply to  Susan Dawson

It certainly is, Susan! I love writing these 100 worders. I can’t wait for the next micro prompt!

Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe (@eric-radcliffe)
6 months ago

Congratulations, a wonderful write Susan, expressed in all the comments. Well done.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
6 months ago

Congratulations on your win, a wonderful write. I am happy for you, Susan.

Katy Bizi
Katy Bizi (@katy-bizi)
6 months ago

Congratulations, Susan, on your win! With a jab of golden luck and a lottery ticket to fund the excursions, your character will hopefully make their dreams come true.

Sandra James
Sandra James (@sandra-james)
3 months ago

Great story, Susan! It’s been a long day and I’m finally relaxing and catching up on the ‘discourse’ stories I’ve missed. I live in a gold-mining area in Australia and would add that to the list of hopeful treasure sites for me. Alas, no ticket here either but I think your ending is 24 carat 🙂

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