He watched her walk down the aisle and wondered why brides didn’t dress in gold, why she wasn’t clad in the color that reflected how truly precious she was. He pictured the years passing–family barbeques, vacations, births, holidays. She’d shimmer, glitter, enamor him at each. Their lifelong connection would be fully established today, in only a few moments. He felt his heart squeeze when she glanced up and flashed him a smile. 

He prayed he’d eventually be able to see her as fool’s gold. He knew no other way to survive her marriage to his brother.

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Voice-Team(@voice-team)
1 year ago

Surprise ending, well written. A very enjoyable read.

Fuji
Fuji(@fuji)
1 year ago

Wow! You got me hooked. When he said he hoped he’d see her as fool’s gold, I was taken aback. What a thing for a new husband to say! Then I read the last line. An excellent story, and a nice addition to the pile of gold we have in this contest.

Fuji
Fuji(@fuji)
1 year ago
Reply to  Danielle Burke

You’ll love it here! Everyone is so supportive, and the stories are so well-written. I learn a lot each time I browse the site. A big welcome to you.

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Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
1 year ago

Just like Fuji, I was totally hooked Danielle. I love stories that can surprise me and yours did this brilliantly. Really well written. Loved it!

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
1 year ago

Great story. Loved the twist at the end. You really had me fooled that this was the new husband’s POV, right up to the end.

Alan Kemister
Alan Kemister(@alan-kemister)
1 year ago

Wonderful twist at the end, just the way a 100 word story should end.

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Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
1 year ago

It is incredible, Danielle, how you can fit in so much in only 100 words. This story has it all, including the mystery of the double-edged relationship and the surprise moment at the end. Very well done!

Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe(@eric-radcliffe)
1 year ago

I had to chuckle at the end, was it mischief, or jealousy – either way it fits. I liked the way you wrote this Danielle.

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Santina Forlenza
Santina Forlenza(@santina-forlenza)
1 year ago

Hi Danielle, beautiful story about love with a surprising end. I like when the disappointed lover tries to encourage himself by seeing her as ‘fool’s gold’. Brilliant. And congratulations.

Santina Forlenza
Santina Forlenza(@santina-forlenza)
1 year ago
Reply to  Danielle Burke

I fully agree, Danielle. I m quite new in this community, and day after day I m more and more fascinated by its members and all their stories. So many different styles, feelings, sense of humor, poetry. See you around Danielle. And thanks again for your ‘Fool’ s gold. ‘

Juma
Juma(@juma)
1 year ago

Wow, Danielle, you totally mastered the 100-word story on your first try! Congratulations on being selected as a runner up. This is no small achievement, considering your story was competing against some pretty amazing stories written by the brightest and best on the site!! Welcome to the Winners Circle.

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Mary Wallace
Mary Wallace(@mary-wallace)
1 year ago

This is a great story. In the last line, you shatter our ideals and we share in his pain. A very well executed piece. Congratulations.

Susan Dawson
Susan Dawson(@susan-dawson)
1 year ago

Simple, powerful, and congratulations.

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Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe(@eric-radcliffe)
1 year ago

Congratulations Danielle, the reward comes from knowing that your story had so many reads and was enjoyed by everyone here. Well done – looking forward to congratulating you again.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 year ago

What a very surprising ending. Congratulations on your win, Danielle. Hope to read more stories from you here.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 year ago
Reply to  Danielle Burke

Same as me, I am very glad that I sign up for Voice club. 

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Katy Bizi
Katy Bizi(@katy-bizi)
1 year ago

What an ending! I certainly didn’t expect such turn of events. You did an excellent job, Danielle, especially if one considers the limit of words.

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