On Sunday, the blue door is tightly shut, no sign of life.

On Monday, the door is slightly ajar. From somewhere within, a violin.

On Tuesday, two beautiful eyes peer out at me –  one gold, one brown.  The violin sings an invitation.

On Wednesday I bring armfuls of flowers, an outpouring of my exuberant youth.

On Thursday, the eyes are filled with tears. The violin sounds jagged, like broken glass.

On Friday, the two eyes, the violin, the deep blue door – all are gone, leaving no trace.  And I, I have suddenly become a very old man.

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Susan Dawson
Susan Dawson(@susan-dawson)
1 year ago

Very mysterious. I feel Saturday would be a no-go area, and you’ve got me feeling my age because it’s Friday today. I am wondering about the gold and brown eye, and you have certainly made me wonder about the door or what lies behind.

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Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
1 year ago

This is so intriguing Juma. My romantic heart imagines a story of love and loss. You leave me with so many questions, a sense of sadness and a faint hope for Saturday.

Dipayan Chakrabarti
Dipayan Chakrabarti(@dipayan-chakrabarti)
1 year ago

The story is full of a mysterious vigour and artful symbolism. Excellent Juma!

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Dipayan Chakrabarti
Dipayan Chakrabarti(@dipayan-chakrabarti)
1 year ago
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You’re welcome.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 year ago

I wonder what would happen on Saturday. Very artistic yet very intriguing. You are a very talented writer, Juma.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 year ago
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You’re welcome.

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Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe(@eric-radcliffe)
1 year ago

This is a brave piece of writing Juma, especially knowing that it also holds in part a mystery to yourself in this part – dream like story…… ”Blue Door” – perhaps feeling blue (sad) in yourself about the image, and is the door, the door to that past event?

Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe(@eric-radcliffe)
1 year ago

Juma, isn’t it strange, after mentioning the word sad to you, I get an email from a site that I am on, and this is what it said…………When you say someone is tall, you mean they are long of body or leg, right? Lanky, towering, Brobdingnagian? Well, that might be true now, but the word “tall” used to mean something completely different. To be tall in the 15th century was to be “handsome”, “elegant” or even sometimes “skillful”. And the word “sad” used to mean “firm” or “resolute” long before we started to use it to describe feeling blue. These are two of five common words that have evolved over time to mean something completely different.

Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe(@eric-radcliffe)
1 year ago
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Thank you for the videos Juma. I must confess, I have a trait, where I often see the humour before other things in stories, and such. I’m sometimes told off for being a bit flippant, though I swear I’m not. (where are you going with this Eric?) I’m getting there Juma……) I was going to say when I watched the video on Chefchaouen – I just imagined going into the paint shop and saying – I’m going to paint my house, what colours do you have?
And the assistant saying, we have a nice Blue! Right lets get back to being serious.( I don’t get that Eric? How is that funny?) Moving on quickly….Stories can often tell us about the writer, and I see that colour plays an important part in your life Juma. Do you paint? Or does it come to the fore because of your gardening?

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Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
1 year ago

Your story is very intriguing, Juma. And your comments make it even more fascinating. When you mention the eyes of the Afghan refugee, they are so clearly in my mind. As you, I would like to see the story as an allegory, with each day symbolizing a decade. And even if the outcome seems sad, there is always the hope for the last day of the week.

Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse(@marianna-pieterse)
1 year ago

Juma, I also got the impression that one day symbolised a longer period of time, possibly years. Maybe the eyes were of a lover or friend who was no longer there towards “Friday”. The lack of a line for Saturday certainly leaves with me a feeling of hope that something good will happen. Isn’t it amazing that each story can take a turn in any direction from where you left off? I love the mystery in this one. Well done.

Julie Harris
Julie Harris(@julie-harris)
1 year ago

A fascinating story, Juma, full of mystery and other-worldliness. I personally don’t hold out much hope for Saturday. This does not seem like it should be a story with a happy ending. Nonetheless, it’s very beautiful, and seems to encompass a great deal of human experience.

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Daisy Blacklock
Daisy Blacklock(@daisy-blacklock)
1 year ago

This is a brilliant story. I love how you used the days of the week to progress and reveal a little more each day. It was such a mysterious story and left me pondering.

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