“I’m so bored!” I grumped to no-one in particular, moments before hearing ’pitter-pat, patter-pit, rat-a-tat-tat’ from under my bed. 

Ducking down to take a peremptory peek, the dust tickled and tingled the back of my nose into an explosive sneeze, startling the dust bunnies, who hopped into a heap at the foot of my bed.

A parcel lay enticingly in front of a tiny door in the skirting. I slithered onto my belly and pulled it out, reading, ‘If you’re our Alice, you’ll know just what to do.’

To no-one in particular, I happily exclaimed, “I’m going back to Wonderland!”

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Juma
Juma(@juma)
1 year ago

Delightful, Carrie! Dust bunnies hopping, a little girl slithering, an alluring invitation – you had me enthralled from beginning to end. Great story!

Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
1 year ago

An intriguing parcel and another adventure for Alice. Lovely! Good job Carrie.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 year ago

So awesome. It is another adventure for Alice. I really love a magical tale like this. Nice job, Carrie.

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Dipayan Chakrabarti
Dipayan Chakrabarti(@dipayan-chakrabarti)
1 year ago

A good try Carrie. The fantastical element in your story is crucial to the plot.

Dipayan Chakrabarti
Dipayan Chakrabarti(@dipayan-chakrabarti)
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1 year ago

You’re welcome.

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Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe(@eric-radcliffe)
1 year ago

A fun and imaginative write Carrie, well done.

Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse(@marianna-pieterse)
1 year ago

Carrie, I love the idea of another adventure for Alice! This was so beautifully described, it had me captivated.

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