Knock-knock.
“Come in, darling,” she sings out happily.

Knock-knock.
“Come on in – you have your key!”

Knock-knock.
“I said come in! You’re starting to push me over the edge.”

Knock-knock.
“Come in, for the love of God!” She screams. “What kind of game are you playing?”

Knock-knock-knock.
“Don’t do this to me!” She can feel veins popping in her forehead as she laboriously wheels herself across the room. She reaches for the door knob, leaning, falling…

“Massive heart attack,” the doctor says. “I’m so sorry.”
The husband tries to look grief-stricken. “It worked,” he exults silently, “Free at last!”

 

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    Carrie OLeary
    Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
    2 years ago

    Well, that’s one way to do it. I worry about authors sometimes; are we all a bunch of closet serial killers? We certainly plot to kill our protagonists within our written words. It’s one of those stories where you wish the plot had backfired. Good job.

    Katerina Bizirtsaki
    Katerina Bizirtsaki(@katerina-bizirtsaki)
    Reply to  Carrie OLeary
    2 years ago

    Wow, Carrie. I have to say that your comment did make me think back to all the different stories that I have written and count how many protagonists I had to kill off. It’s scary really! And I’m sure I’m not the only one who came to the conclusion that I am a fictional killer!

    Katerina Bizirtsaki
    Katerina Bizirtsaki(@katerina-bizirtsaki)
    Reply to  Carrie OLeary
    2 years ago

    On the other hand, even though it’s sad to realize how many stories of ours revolve around death, I do believe it’s necessary sometimes. Such a vital theme can truly get across our lesson or the emotion we want to convey. Still, after your comment, I think I’ll have to think twice when it comes to killing off another protagonist in a story to come.

    Katerina Bizirtsaki
    Katerina Bizirtsaki(@katerina-bizirtsaki)
    Reply to  Fuji
    2 years ago

    Well, if you think about that, then yes, you’re right. A lot of best-selling stories contain murder, but if you start thinking about your protagonists as your children, then it is a bit harder to kill them off!

    Katerina Bizirtsaki
    Katerina Bizirtsaki(@katerina-bizirtsaki)
    2 years ago

    I love how it’s up to the reader to think of how the husband was involved in her death and I think that’s why stories this short are so interactive. There are multiple answers one can think of for the questions left unanswered and that’s the beauty of it!

    Linda Rock
    Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
    2 years ago

    A gripping 100 words Fuji with a delicious slice of evil at the end! Readers will view your story in different ways which is why it makes it irresistibly interesting.

    Eric Radcliffe
    Eric Radcliffe(@eric-radcliffe)
    2 years ago

    Oo! Fuji, this is going to give a lot of sleepless nights to your neighbours. You have the gift of the cunningly unexpected. One to watch out for?? (I mean the story, not you.)

    Eric Radcliffe
    Eric Radcliffe(@eric-radcliffe)
    Reply to  Fuji
    2 years ago

    Is that Witch or Which?

    Dipayan Chakrabarti
    Dipayan Chakrabarti(@dipayan-chakrabarti)
    2 years ago

    Hello Fuji,
    I find the story absolutely exciting.

    Marianna Pieterse
    Marianna Pieterse(@marianna-pieterse)
    2 years ago

    Fuji, I could only wonder what brought this reaction of the husband along until I read your comment below about his wife’s personality. She must have really been dreadful if she pushed him to that point!

    Lotchie Carmelo
    Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
    2 years ago

    Well, the ending surprised me with her husband’s involvement in her death. Well written.

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