Sandra had as many kinds of fears as there were colors in her make up kit: red fear for punishment, blue for humiliation, white for fear of being nothing. She feared not being smart enough, confident enough, attractive enough. She felt fear for disappointments and uncertainty; even for fear itself.

One after the other, the doors to her heart imperceptibly closed. Her most valued treasures—hope, trust and peace—were left inside, safely locked up as in a solid bank vault. Nobody, not even Sandra, had access to the combination.

And afterwards, people said, “How strange! That girl had everything!

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Dipayan Chakrabarti
Dipayan Chakrabarti(@dipayan-chakrabarti)
1 year ago

A well written micro fiction, Christer. Excellent!

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Dipayan Chakrabarti(@dipayan-chakrabarti)
Reply to  Christer Norrlof
1 year ago

You’re welcome.

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Fuji
Fuji(@fuji)
1 year ago

A very powerful story, Christer. The word “afterwards” says it all, while at the same time, it says nothing directly. These 100 word stories teach us – both as writers and as readers – the depth of meaning in a single word. Great job.

Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
1 year ago

Your story leaves me with the question ‘what happened to her?’ Christer. She obviously didn’t see in herself what others did. I’m thinking if something bad had happened to her, people would more likely have said “How sad.” rather than “How strange!” But I could be completely wrong! See how you have now left me guessing! I love stories like this!

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 year ago

A very well-written story, Christer. It is like a mirror to myself. I also have many fears within, the same fears as your protagonist has but we differ on our most valued treasures because for me my most valued treasures are: family, faith and prayer to God, hope, trust, peace, and love. These 100 words imply a very deep meaning. Excellent.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
Reply to  Christer Norrlof
1 year ago

Yes, I can vividly imagine that. Thank you for sharing this kind of story here.

Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse(@marianna-pieterse)
1 year ago

Christer, you have said so much in only a few words. Your choice of words in the last line is brilliant and as other people have commented, left you wondering about what happened to her. Well done.

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Katy Bizi
Katy Bizi(@katy-bizi)
1 year ago

100 words and yet you wrote another masterpiece, Christer! The story actually begins after the reader stops reading it and that’s the magic of literature.

Katy Bizi
Katy Bizi(@katy-bizi)
Reply to  Christer Norrlof
1 year ago

You are so right, Christer, I couldn’t have said it better!

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Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe(@eric-radcliffe)
1 year ago

Wonderfully written Christer, we can all relate to the word fear, and how sad when it rules, for it is the thief of all thieves. This story Christer, has a lot of under the radar wisdom.
Passwords we all forget, perhaps she will remember the combination one day.

Danielle Burke
Danielle Burke(@danielle-burke)
1 year ago

Your first line (relating her fears with the colors in the make up kit) grabbed me. The bank vault simile is equally engaging. Great imagery! And the fact that she can’t access those vital contents is heart-breaking.

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Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
1 year ago

I think you’ve just written my biography Christer, not that I had it all, but it is all too easy to lose confidence in yourself and in other people, fear that you’re not good enough. Locking up your emotions is just the next step along the road. You’ve written this so well.

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