We entered the labyrinth as one group, feeling our way along the mirrored walls, towards, hopefully, the exit.

“The manifold reflections make it impossible to see which way to go,” I said.

One careful step at a time I led the group. We split up without anyone noticing. Mirrored doors opened and closed. One opened to my right. I stared into bewildered faces.

“How did they get there?” I wondered.

I gave a weak smile. Lights flashed incessantly, adding to my disoriented feel. I feared panic would overtake me. Another door opened. Finally, the exit was in sight!

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Fuji
Fuji (@fuji)
6 months ago

Fascinating story, Marianna. All those reflections and flashing lights were making me quite dizzy, just imagining them. I wonder if the perceived exit at the end might have also been an optical illusion, perhaps light bouncing off shiny surfaces? You’ve created an eerie, unsettling landscape with just a few words. Good job!

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary (@carrie-oleary)
6 months ago

Very nicely done Marianna. I’ve never experienced a mirrored room. Not sure I’d want to either, far too disorienting! Good job.

Linda Rock
Linda Rock (@linda-rock)
6 months ago

I could feel the tension and her fear building in your story Marianna, revealing itself in the final paragraph. Because you left us with the words ‘the exit was in sight’ left me wondering if she had really found it! Good job!

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Linda Rock
Linda Rock (@linda-rock)
6 months ago

I forgot to mention that I loved the picture you chose  ? 

Katy Bizi
Katy Bizi (@katy-bizi)
6 months ago
Reply to  Linda Rock

You are right, Linda. Before reading your comment, I assumed the protagonist had found the exit and could now leave the mirrored room. But what if it was all an illusion? After all, all is possible inside a space full of illusions.

Linda Rock
Linda Rock (@linda-rock)
6 months ago
Reply to  Katy Bizi

Exactly Katy. The exit may have been in sight but what if it wasn’t the exit? That is what leaves me wondering in Marianna’s story.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
6 months ago

So interesting. I wonder how it feels inside in the mirrored room, I never experienced it at all. And I am thankful that your story takes me there, I keep on imagining it. I feel the tension and fear of your protagonist.

Susan Dawson
Susan Dawson (@susan-dawson)
6 months ago

I wonder if the bewildered faces were part of the original group. It is strange how unreal mirrors make things seem. I remember my granddaughter within two angled mirrors in a science museum performing a dance where she was seeming to be holding hands in a ring with 5 identical others.

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Katy Bizi
Katy Bizi (@katy-bizi)
6 months ago

A room full of mirrors, that is already making me feel dizzy! Having been once in such a room, I have to say you get easily disoriented and lose track of both space and time. Your story brought back this memory, Marianna. Nicely done!

Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof (@christer-norrlof)
6 months ago

Your story took me back to my childhood, Mariana. I was 12 years old when my school class went to an amusement park where there was a mirror labyrinth. We were running around like crazy, laughing and surprising each other. Several times, I was running towards my identical twin brother, only to discover that it was my own reflection in a mirror that I was seeing. Afterwards, he told me that he had experienced the same thing. Thanks for bringing up the memory and for the nice story!

Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe (@eric-radcliffe)
6 months ago

Could the mirrors be a reflection of the many choices we have to make, looking for solutions? (to exit from them) Thought provoking Marianna.

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Thompson Emate (@thompson-emate)
5 months ago

I have never been through a mirror labyrinth and don’t think I would want to. Too many reflections can be quite a scare. I think I saw something like that in Rihanna’s ‘SOS’ video. A nice write.

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary (@carrie-oleary)
5 months ago

Congratulations Marianna, this story resonated with me, mainly because I really hate mirrors. Good job.

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Julie Harris
Julie Harris (@julie-harris)
5 months ago

Congratulations, Marianna. What an unusual story! It keeps the reader gripped from beginning to end.

Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe (@eric-radcliffe)
5 months ago

Well done Marianna, the mirrors in your story certainly got the readers attention.

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Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe (@eric-radcliffe)
5 months ago

The pleasure is all mine

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Linda Rock
Linda Rock (@linda-rock)
5 months ago

Congratulations Marianna, I’m so pleased for you, Great story!

Daisy Blacklock
Daisy Blacklock (@daisy-blacklock)
4 months ago

This is a great story. A very well deserved win. I think that the shorter sentences that you used worked really well. I also love your title, it fits very nicely with your story.

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