Beneath the bough of a cherry tree a child is conceived and, within a year lies buried beneath the same tree.  She weeps at the grave – heartbroken – while cherry blossoms rain down as tears on the scene.   He struggles – she turns away – he pleads – she says she will let him know when she is ready to live again.

Life continues.   Time flows around all, even those who are reluctant to accept this fact, who struggle to hold on to the past.

Far away he rests beside a flowing river wending from orchard to sea.  In his hand, a letter.  He opens it – the envelope releases cherry blossoms falling as tears to the ground.

It is time to go home.

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Voice-Team (@voice-team)
7 months ago

A very short, poetic story. Lovely rendering of cherry blossoms as love and loss and renewal. 

Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe (@eric-radcliffe)
7 months ago

Hello Susan, the first thing that comes to my mind is, why write 350 words, when you can say it in less, a thought for all who read this story. It’s true, and for some, sadness will be part of their lives, but, there will be healing, if given time. Your story so beautifully written reminds us so.

Fuji
Fuji (@fuji)
7 months ago

Brevity can be so beautiful. This series of phrases “He struggles – she turns away – he pleads” says so much more than long sentences could. Excellent writing.

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Linda Rock
Linda Rock (@linda-rock)
7 months ago

Susan this is so beautiful. So much said in so few words and overflowing with emotion. Today I have learnt something which I know will enhance my writing, thank you for the lesson. If I could give more than 1 like, I would.

Brigitta Hegyi
Brigitta Hegyi (@brigitta-hegyi)
7 months ago

Beautiful and sad. Sometimes less is more. 🙂

Danielle Burke
Danielle Burke (@danielle-burke)
7 months ago

Wow, Susan. I love the imagery with the cherry blossoms/tears, particularly this line: “He opens it – the envelope releases cherry blossoms falling as tears to the ground.”

To the point and extremely powerful with both the literal and figurative meaning of “release”.

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Dipayan Chakrabarti
Dipayan Chakrabarti (@dipayan-chakrabarti)
7 months ago

The explicitness and detail of the mind-pictures have charmed me along with the brevity of space and expression.

Dipayan Chakrabarti
Dipayan Chakrabarti (@dipayan-chakrabarti)
7 months ago
Reply to  Susan Giles

You’re welcome.

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary (@carrie-oleary)
7 months ago

So much sadness in this Susan, but in the end there is so much hope. I too loved the second to last line. Good stuff.

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Sandra James
Sandra James (@sandra-james)
7 months ago

I agree with the previous comments – so much in so few words and it works so well. A beautiful story and very well written 🙂

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
7 months ago

I love it, Susan. A very short story but so much in it. You nailed it, Susan. Congratulations.

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