Hall stretches before her – no end in sight.  Walls constrict with memories of fear, abuse, ridicule, belittling.  Words and actions meant to humiliate and constrain work to bind until no soul, no self remains.  Her life – an endless hall.

Then! The words of encouragement – a question posed – causes a door to appear in the hall.  She is suddenly aware of the opportunity given her:  step through the door and leave this hall of hell.

She knows if she ignores the door today, it will close forever.

Deep breath – head held high – she opens the door and walks through.

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7 months ago

What a relief when the protagonist finally finds a door and walks through it. We do wonder what the “question posed” might have been! Great writing.

Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse (@marianna-pieterse)
7 months ago

Susan, I love this! Such a contrast from the situation that she was in to the hope that lies on the other side of the door. I really like the positive ending. Well done.

Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe (@eric-radcliffe)
7 months ago

Hello Susan, strong words to describe that there is a decision that has to be made, does she have the courage to walk? You make the point that sometimes there is only one opportunity. A strong story Susan, well written, well done.

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary (@carrie-oleary)
7 months ago

Hi Susan. I love the symbolism in this. There are so many people who feel trapped in an endless existence, just trying to find a way out. If only it was as simple as finding a door and exiting, of finding ‘life’. Sometimes it takes a great amount of courage to open that door and leave, especially if they’ve developed, I suppose, a type of Stockholm Syndrome. Sometimes a person will blame themselves for the situation they’re in and when they find the exit, they don’t feel they have the right to leave. A very poignant piece that certainly gives you a lot to think about, and executed beautifully in such a very few words. Oh, and I don’t know if it was intentional or not, but I do like that you used the wrought iron door in your picture, a door you can clearly see through to what life could be on the other side.

Last edited 7 months ago by Carrie OLeary
Lisa Shea
Lisa Shea (@lisa-shea)
7 months ago

Susan, it is so true that a single kind phrase from a person can completely change a person’s life. Every day we have that opportunity to lift another person from darkness, if we offer that welcoming hand. Thank you for reminding us of that.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
7 months ago

I love it, Susan. Well done.

Daisy Blacklock
Daisy Blacklock (@daisy-blacklock)
6 months ago

I love how at the end, your character finds the courage to open the door. It is so nice to see that people do manage to get the courage after feeling so trapped.

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