Under Pink Blossoms
I grew up in Japan amid majestic mountains and vales. Our manor-house was paradise to me with colourful flower garden, birds, and insects.
I used to saunter around the serpentine corridors, intricate passageways, spiralling arches, and the tiny flower garden of the country-house on quiet afternoons when Granny took a nap. My grandfather had died in the dark damp room which gave access to our beautiful flower garden.
One afternoon I was walking around our flower garden when there was no noise or activity. A sweet smell of flowers hung in the air. Nature looked breathtakingly beautiful. I wanted to see those bright, bold, and beautiful flowers after the cold and dark sky of winter. Substantial warming had already occurred, causing new growth. The music teacher’s soporific voice streamed through the air into my ears from the music school. The lone dove startled me when it cooed. I couldn’t believe my eyes when I encountered a beautiful girl sleeping under a cherry tree laden with beautiful pink blossoms. Her beauty arrested me. I kept gazing at her. I spotted a pink flower near her head. I picked it up.
But she didn’t stir into wakefulness when I touched her forehead with the full-bloomed flower. Granny’s loud voice startled me. The beautiful girl just vanished and was never seen again. Maybe someday she would bring exceptional happiness.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleHello again Dipayan, reading your story helps me to see how beauty can evoke the imagination, help us to dream, and to hold on to our dreams. Thank you.
You’re welcome Eric. The story is created from memories, imaginations, hopes, fears, unconscious needs, and other influences. I’ve only tried to describe the sights, sounds, and sensations that hovered around me in my adolescence.
Beautiful story, I like the descriptions! 🙂
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It is a vivid and touching story which is very bright with colours. Perfect!
Thanks for being so kind.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleI’m also attracted by the deep emotions and the old world charm which surrounded the little protagonist.
I’ve also tried to focus on the reality of death in my story.
Is your story a study of the characteristics of children?
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleOh yes, you can say that. The eagerness of adolescence, to explore, and to discover are vividly expressed with deep sympathy and sensitivity.
The vivid and rich imagery is the essential component of your story and adds to its meaning and effect. Nice work, Dipayan.
Thank you! I’ve only tried to use visual, olfactory, auditory, and tactile imagery to create deep and touching emotions.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleYou’re welcome. I can see dream colours, hear dream music, smell dream fragrances hovering at the edge of reality as I read your story again and again.
The story ends on a high leaving a sweet taste at its conclusion. Thanks for all your kind comments.
Congratulations, Dipayan.
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Wonderful Bobby…….Love it??
Thanks for your comment. Your kind words have warmed my heart.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with Google‘Congratulations for the win. Your story has left me speechless. The little boy had remarkable powers of observation.’
Thanks to you. Yeah, the little boy was very sensitive to the surroundings.
Every line in the story is pregnant with meaning. It reminds me of my childhood, of an era of simple pleasures.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleI’m glad to know that. I’ve only tried to achieve an universal appeal.
The ‘dark damp room’ and the ‘breathtakingly beautiful’ Nature are mentioned to create a sense of contrast between dream and reality.
At a time when all prevailing darkness make our days sad and gloomy, your writing brings a ray of fresh hope, touches the heart and makes living bearable again. Kudos. Keep writing.
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Excellent story……keep on writing…????
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleInteresting how in all stories I am reading Cherry blossoms are always somehow linked to a loss, love and death and life. Cherry trees really bring deep meanings to all of us.
Yes Santina, we’re all inspired by the charming picture of ‘cherry blossoms’ and its accompanying poem. We’ve all joined in the dream as dreamed by Voice.club.
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Dipayan, I greatly enjoy reading your stories.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleBeautifully written..heart touching story
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Wonderful story. I like it.
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Excellent writing… Nicely descriptive.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleBeautiful story!! Love it.
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Simple and nice.
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Beautifully written!! Took me back to my childhood days and away from the hassles of city life. Very vivid and descriptive narration of one’s thought!! Keep it up!!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThe sentences lead one into an abstract world of crazy hues. When you come out, the trip is worth recalling. Great going!
The story has a symbolic function as well. It is a cameo of universal aspect of human experience.
Beautiful story.
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An intriguing story, Dipayan. I do hope there is more to that beautiful girl in the future and she somehow does bring happiness 🙂
Thanks for your kind words.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThe relation between dream and reality is skillfully portrayed by you in your story. It has also a penetrating realism. Perfect!
The experiences of the little boy can be applicable to many individuals and conditions. Thanks for the compliments.
You’re welcome. I’ve enjoyed all the telling mental images portrayed in the story.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleI’m glad to know that. The story is itself an image composed from a cluster of images.
I sat dazed after reading the story. The “Serpentine corridors,” the “intricate passageways,” the “spiralling arches,” and the “tiny flower garden” took me back to my childhood.
I’ve tried to vary the explicitness and detail of the mind-pictures. I’ve only made an effort to refer to qualities of smell and hearing, as well as sight, in the flash fiction.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThe death of the boy’s grandfather was his first intimation of mortality. You write very movingly indeed.
Thanks again. ‘Cherry blossoms’ symbolize the fleeting nature of life. So the end of life is mentioned.
An interesting story Dipayan. Is the girl a ghost, or a vision of a possible future. Intriguing.
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What a lovely piece it is, Dipayan. I love it.
Thank you very much.
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Congratulations Dipayan!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleCongratulations, Dipayan, on a very beautiful story!
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Congratulations Dipayan.
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Dipayan, you are more than welcome.
Congratulations Dipayan.
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Congratulations Dipayan.
Congratulations Dipayan!!!
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Congratulations, Dipayan! This was a beautiful story.
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Way to go Dipayan !!
I agree. Thank you!
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Congratulations for the win.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleCongratulations Dipayan! Proud to be your friend! Keep it up!
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Dipayan Chakrabarti is a very talented writer. He loves to portray the life as a person visualises, making it more realistic. He loves playing with simple words, juggling them to make a story, just like stitching a colourful garland from a basket of flowers.
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I love your word choices: “I used to saunter around the serpentine corridors”. You have certainly painted a beautiful image.
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