She stands,
Eyes brimming,
Cheek burning,
Waiting,
for a slamming car door
that signals him gone.

Is it enough,
to make her brave?
that slapped cheek,
or broken bones,
black eyes, cut lips.

What will it take?
her hope is gone,
her dreams are shattered,
her body is broken,
her heart aches.

What will it take,
to find her courage,
to pack suitcases,
to leave,
and start over again?

What will it take,
what last piece of strength
must she find,
what last piece of dignity
must she lose
to be ready to run
when that car door slams?

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Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse (@marianna-pieterse)
1 year ago

Mary, this says so much in a 100 words. It is tragic how many people are in an abusive relationship, too scared to leave. I cannot help to wonder how many victims feel isolated from the world, possibly by the doing of the abusive partner. Very sad indeed. Well done for portraying this so well. The short sentences and lines certainly adds to the tension. Reading this I was hoping that the protagonist would leave by the end of the story. ?

Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse (@marianna-pieterse)
1 year ago
Reply to  Mary Wallace

You are so right, Mary. It is terrible.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
1 year ago

This is so tragic and sad. I can’t help but cry. Well done, Mary.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
1 year ago
Reply to  Mary Wallace

I am hoping that too.

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary (@carrie-oleary)
1 year ago

Quite heartbreaking, Mary. A situation that so many find themselves in, but how many find the actual courage to leave compared to how many suffer in silence and despair.

Last edited 1 year ago by Carrie OLeary
Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe (@eric-radcliffe)
1 year ago

I think Marianna has summed it up beautifully. I can only agree with her, and also in your reply Mary.

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Daisy Blacklock
Daisy Blacklock (@daisy-blacklock)
11 months ago

The effect of repeating ‘what will it take’ gives a great effect. This happens to too many people – it’s so heart-breaking.

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