Hands clap and I’m awake.

“Everything ok?” the hypnotist asks, a mischievous glint in his eye.

No!  Everything’s different.

Arriving home, my neighbour greets me.

“Good morning.”

I doff an invisible hat.

“Any plans for today?”  she asks.

I walk to my rose bush and prune my roses with invisible shears.

“Are you alright?”

I shake my head.

I’m a writer.  He claimed he’d help me master the art of ‘show don’t tell’.

I agree, his little trick was funny at first… until he failed to reverse it!

So, until he succeeds, I’m left to gesture through life… completely animated!

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Voice-Team
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1 year ago

Great illustration of “showing” rather than “telling”. No writer will quickly forget this story! Lots of fun, with a bit of learning thrown in. Nice image as well.

Last edited 1 year ago by Voice-Team
Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
1 year ago

Such an awful situation to be left in. Great story Linda, your protagonist’s life is different indeed.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 year ago

Wow. This story is completely different. I like it.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
Reply to  Linda Rock
1 year ago

Yes, you are right, Linda. That’s why I always love it here in Voice club. It helps me boost and enhance my imagination on every story that I read here.

Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe(@eric-radcliffe)
1 year ago

Are you alright now Linda? I see you are still miming and waving to everyone. The milk man has just made a hasty retreat down the path – I think I’ll call back later.

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Julie Harris
Julie Harris(@julie-harris)
1 year ago

Linda, this is just priceless! You’ve certainly “shown” us what that famous writer’s advice means! Brilliant story, and great picture.

Daisy Blacklock
Daisy Blacklock(@daisy-blacklock)
1 year ago

I really enjoyed this story. Your style of writing is very unique.

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Daisy Blacklock
Daisy Blacklock(@daisy-blacklock)
Reply to  Linda Rock
1 year ago

No problem!

Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse(@marianna-pieterse)
1 year ago

Linda, I love this! It certainly reminded me to ‘show, don’t tell’ and showed a very practical way to do so too! I enjoyed reading this. Well done, this is a great story.

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Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
1 year ago

This was a fun read, Linda. In an absurd way, it shows the power of the mind. And it is also a good reminder not to try to make any short-cuts. Writing well isn’t an easy thing!

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Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
1 year ago

Congratulations to the two of us, Linda, for our runner-up stories!

Julie Harris
Julie Harris(@julie-harris)
1 year ago

Congratulations, Linda, on a well-deserved win. Love this brilliant story!

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 year ago

Congratulations, Linda.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
Reply to  Linda Rock
1 year ago

You’re always welcome.

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
1 year ago

Well done Linda, this is such a fun story, and definitely a writer’s nightmare.

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Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse(@marianna-pieterse)
1 year ago

Linda, I love the humour in your story. It was fun to read. Congratulations on your win!

Fuji
Fuji(@fuji)
1 year ago

Congratulations, Linda, and thanks for your light-hearted response to the great prompt!

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Sandra James
Sandra James(@sandra-james)
1 year ago

A wonderful story, Linda. As the Voice-team said it is a great example of showing, not telling and one we will remember. Sitting here chuckling – well done!

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