The minutes ticked by as she hesitated. It was as if the room were holding its breath waiting for her decision.

The two doors didn’t appear to be any different, or provide any answers as to which one she had entered through. Maybe I should just open the package now?  She lifted it up and shook it a little, listening to it rattle softly inside. This is ridiculous. She looked at the doors again willing them to expose their secrets within. Left. You always choose left in a maze to lead you out.

Her hand reached for the right doorknob.

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Voice-Team (@voice-team)
8 months ago

This wonderful story is part of a series. To read all the Monday stories, go to Search and type in “Monday (“. Enjoy!

Julie Harris
Julie Harris (@julie-harris)
8 months ago

Love it, Lisa! It was fun going back and reading all three Monday stories again. I love in this one that her head said “left” but her hand reached for “right”. Keep these stories coming!

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary (@carrie-oleary)
8 months ago

I love, not only how diverse each of our stories are for each prompt, but also that they guide us in a direction. I certainly found many of my recurring characters and storylines, over the last couple of years, completing the Write Academy 100 word weekend challenges every week. It’s great that you are using each consecutive prompt to build on to your story. Good job, and great suspense.

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Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe (@eric-radcliffe)
8 months ago

Again Lisa, lots of questions, keeping the reader guessing. A little hint, perhaps next time, or do we make it Tuesday?

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
8 months ago

This is wonderful, Lisa. Eric is right as you also left many questions in my mind. Like which door is your protagonist go8ng to open (as he/she chooses left first but her hand reached the right doorknob). Will your protagonist open the right doorknob? You keep me guessing.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
8 months ago
Reply to  Lisa Gledhill

You’re welcome.

Linda Rock
Linda Rock (@linda-rock)
8 months ago

Well you certainly leave us guessing Lisa and wanting more. Love the second sentence! Look forward to the next instalment!

Daisy Blacklock
Daisy Blacklock (@daisy-blacklock)
8 months ago

This story is brilliant and very mysterious.

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Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse (@marianna-pieterse)
8 months ago

Lisa, I agree with Linda, I love the second sentence. It adds a lot of tension to your story. I’m also left wondering what is behind each door and did she pick the right one?

Susan Dawson
Susan Dawson (@susan-dawson)
7 months ago

This could go on til Christmas

Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof (@christer-norrlof)
7 months ago

It might be as thrilling for you, Lisa, as it is for us, the readers, to let the Voice.club prompts decide in which direction your story will go and what’s going to happen next to your protagonist. I’m looking forward to see what will show up next. Just like the previous ones, this is a very well written piece.

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