By hearth and home, I wait endlessly, as your pale ship sails through interwoven sea and sky. I weep and wonder and worry, dreading the moon-cold lonely nights. Gold of sunset, rose of dawn, and still no sight of you, my love, my dear, my trueling.

Then, your astonishing letter. White sails in the harbor, my petticoats flying, the gulls rejoicing. I bind my hair, bank the fires, don a waistcoat and breeches, a three-corner hat.

And now a different home awaits us – dark blue sea-foam, stars swirling in our wake – the Captain and his First and only Mate.

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1 year ago

Almost a prose poem – we loved the inner rhymes and alliteration, yet not a word was wasted toward telling the actual story. Very beautiful image, perfectly fitting the poetic atmosphere.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 year ago

I love the first paragraph of your story, Julie. It is a nice message for a seaman and his wife waiting for him to come home. I love its poetic rhyme.

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Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 year ago
Reply to  Julie Harris

You’re welcome, Julie.

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
1 year ago

This is a very enjoyable read Julie, beautifully written and tells a good long story in such a very few words. Very nicely done.

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Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
1 year ago
Reply to  Julie Harris

Quite right, why should the boys have all the fun whilst us poor girls get left with a trip to the market being our grandest adventure ?

Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
1 year ago

I love the alliteration and colours sprinkled throughout your story Julie. It brings to mind those swashbuckling movies of years ago. Beautifully written.

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Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe(@eric-radcliffe)
1 year ago

Julie your story evokes so many pictures in the mind, even the taste of the salt air, all in 100 word. A lovely write.

Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe(@eric-radcliffe)
1 year ago
Reply to  Julie Harris

There is something very magical about water Julie, apart from rivers, seas, and babbling brooks. Look up Dr Emoto’s Water Experiments, you should find them interesting.

Daisy Blacklock
Daisy Blacklock(@daisy-blacklock)
1 year ago

This is a lovely story. Well done.

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Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse(@marianna-pieterse)
1 year ago

Julie, you captured the feeling of anticipation as your protagonist waits for her beloved to return so well. This was beautifully written. I agree with Linda, I like how you created a beautiful, colourful scene in only a few words. Well done.

Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
1 year ago

A very careful and beautiful choice of words, Julie. You paint an intriguing picture, full of colors and emotions, of your protagonist’s world. I hope she likes life on a ship and doesn’t get seasick.

Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
1 year ago

Congratulations, Julie! You did a great work. Your story is extremely well crafted.

Eduardo Olivares
Eduardo Olivares(@eduardo-olivares)
1 year ago

Congratulations Julie. You are true elegancy and high sense of what perfect words are meant to be. Do keep it going !!!

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 year ago

Congratulations on your win, Julie.

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Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
1 year ago

Congratulations Julie, so pleased for you, your story was a favourite of mine. With the voice-club’s recent focus on image, I have to say your choice for this story was absolutely perfect.

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
1 year ago

Congratulations Julie, a very well deserved win.

Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse(@marianna-pieterse)
1 year ago

Congratulations, Julie! Great job.

Susan Dawson
Susan Dawson(@susan-dawson)
1 year ago

Congratulations. Actually, I am not wanting to share the wind and waves with my spouse when he goes out for his catch of lobsters, far too much of a landlubber.

Fuji
Fuji(@fuji)
1 year ago

Congratulations! This really is a beautiful story. Like Susan, I’d rather stay on shore, but your heroine seems to have found her true home! Maybe someday she’ll be the Captain and her husband can be First Mate.

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Sandra James
Sandra James(@sandra-james)
1 year ago

Well done, Julie! So much in so few words and I feel like donning a three-corner hat, too 🙂 Congratulations!

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