Wind and Waves
By hearth and home, I wait endlessly, as your pale ship sails through interwoven sea and sky. I weep and wonder and worry, dreading the moon-cold lonely nights. Gold of sunset, rose of dawn, and still no sight of you, my love, my dear, my trueling.
Then, your astonishing letter. White sails in the harbor, my petticoats flying, the gulls rejoicing. I bind my hair, bank the fires, don a waistcoat and breeches, a three-corner hat.
And now a different home awaits us – dark blue sea-foam, stars swirling in our wake – the Captain and his First and only Mate.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleAlmost a prose poem – we loved the inner rhymes and alliteration, yet not a word was wasted toward telling the actual story. Very beautiful image, perfectly fitting the poetic atmosphere.
I love the first paragraph of your story, Julie. It is a nice message for a seaman and his wife waiting for him to come home. I love its poetic rhyme.
Thanks so much, Lotchie. I love poetry and I think that 100 word stories are perfect for poetic expression – every word matters so much.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleYou’re welcome, Julie.
This is a very enjoyable read Julie, beautifully written and tells a good long story in such a very few words. Very nicely done.
Thanks so much, Carrie. I wondered why the wives always had to stay home waiting. Surely the life of wind and wave would be wonderful to share with your spouse!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleQuite right, why should the boys have all the fun whilst us poor girls get left with a trip to the market being our grandest adventure ?
I couldn’t have said it any better. Don’t forget the knitting and the needlework – also big adventures. Here’s to more wonderful choices for us “girls”!
I love the alliteration and colours sprinkled throughout your story Julie. It brings to mind those swashbuckling movies of years ago. Beautifully written.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleYes, I admit I did some research that involved pirates and swashbucklers! Thanks for your comment, Linda and for reading my story.
Julie your story evokes so many pictures in the mind, even the taste of the salt air, all in 100 word. A lovely write.
Thank you, Eric. I’m so glad you could smell salt air! Of course, living in Liverpool, that’s not too surprising.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThere is something very magical about water Julie, apart from rivers, seas, and babbling brooks. Look up Dr Emoto’s Water Experiments, you should find them interesting.
This is a lovely story. Well done.
Thanks for reading and commenting, Daisy!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleJulie, you captured the feeling of anticipation as your protagonist waits for her beloved to return so well. This was beautifully written. I agree with Linda, I like how you created a beautiful, colourful scene in only a few words. Well done.
A very careful and beautiful choice of words, Julie. You paint an intriguing picture, full of colors and emotions, of your protagonist’s world. I hope she likes life on a ship and doesn’t get seasick.
Congratulations, Julie! You did a great work. Your story is extremely well crafted.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleCongratulations Julie. You are true elegancy and high sense of what perfect words are meant to be. Do keep it going !!!
Congratulations on your win, Julie.
Congratulations Julie, so pleased for you, your story was a favourite of mine. With the voice-club’s recent focus on image, I have to say your choice for this story was absolutely perfect.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleCongratulations Julie, a very well deserved win.
Congratulations, Julie! Great job.
Congratulations. Actually, I am not wanting to share the wind and waves with my spouse when he goes out for his catch of lobsters, far too much of a landlubber.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleCongratulations! This really is a beautiful story. Like Susan, I’d rather stay on shore, but your heroine seems to have found her true home! Maybe someday she’ll be the Captain and her husband can be First Mate.
Well done, Julie! So much in so few words and I feel like donning a three-corner hat, too 🙂 Congratulations!