“Why can’t you see things the way your brother sees them?”
“Mum, that’s impossible .”
“You know I hate to hear that word, ‘impossible’.”
“Mum, this time around you have to.”
“Daniel!”
“We are different. He can’t wear my shoes, though he’s my brother. Mum, do you know the challenges I go through every day?”
“The ones I don’t see?”
“How would you? They can’t be seen. They’re on the inside. Unlike Philip, I don’t wear my heart on my sleeves.”
“Really?”
“Yes mum. You also once said, ‘The fiercest battles are the ones won and conquered on the inside.”

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Fuji
Fuji(@fuji)
1 year ago

Nice story, Thompson. Your protagonist is so right – the fiercest battles we will ever fight are those that no one sees. I like the way you expressed your ideas through a dialogue with mother and son.

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
1 year ago

Life wouldn’t be very interesting if we weren’t different to each other. Good job keeping the conversation flowing throughout the story.

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Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe(@eric-radcliffe)
1 year ago

Have you ever looked at someones face Thompson, perhaps their eyes, and seen their battle lines? The real person?

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Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
1 year ago

I like it that it is the son in your story who teaches his mother, even using her own words. He seems to be a mature young man, already having fought his inner demons and gained useful life experience. Great dialogue!

Andrea Piña
Andrea Piña(@andrea-pina)
1 year ago

This story reminds me of how my brother and I were compared all the time. It´s very frustrating to know you are your own person and despite that having your accomplishments reduced because of this comparison. But, as siblings grow older, some parents do start to realize that comparing two people who just happen to come out of the same womb may blind them from the differences that make each sibling truly unique and special.

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Daisy Blacklock
Daisy Blacklock(@daisy-blacklock)
1 year ago

This story has the perfect balance. It has some sadness and then at the end, the message is so strong and powerful.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 year ago

Hello, Thompson. This story of yours is amazing. And your use of idiomatic expressions really helps to remind a few people that every person is different. It is superb. I really love it. Good job.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
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1 year ago

You’re welcome, Thompson. I am looking forward to reading more stories from you.

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