Bill and Brian barely hid their sniggers when the priest waxed lyrical, only just falling short of calling the deceased a saint. I admit if I’d been there with them I’d have had difficulty hiding my mirth but I wasn’t exactly with them, for I was the deceased, the object of the priest’s glowing eulogy.

Time had flown since I passed. Literally. I had wings! One minute the doctor pronounced me dead; next I stood at the Pearly Gates with St Peter directing me down a corridor to a room where I was fitted with wings.

‘What now?’ I asked the angel who fitted them.

‘That’s up to you,’ she said.

‘But… I’m not angel material. I’ve been a rogue all my life. I’ve stolen, cheated… probably broken all ten of the commandments.’

‘We know,’ she smiled. ‘It’s your choice what comes next. We have faith in you.’

I was gobsmacked. I’d expected to go to the fiery abode downstairs. They had faith in me? With my record? I was humbled, truly humbled and resolved to atone for my transgressions.

Invisible, I helped old ladies across busy roads, returned runaway toddlers to relieved parents and rescued cats from trees.

Small stuff but it felt good and I wished I’d taken the same path in my former life.

I saw Bill and Brian occasionally, mostly caught up in dodgy activities just like I used to be. I wondered how to enlighten them.

Both mechanics, the pair ran a garage. They were good at their job but sometimes cut corners, using cheaper, dangerous, substandard parts.

Brian’s face was a picture when he lifted a hood to install a shoddy gasket and found me sitting there in winged splendour.

Then I appeared to Bill who was looting the trunk.

I didn’t say a word, just shook my head from side to side. Bill closed the trunk and immediately rang his supplier and ordered stronger gaskets.

They’re both on the straight and narrow now but every so often I leave a snow white feather on a dashboard… just to remind them.

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Voice-Team
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1 year ago

An engaging story of an unlikely angel and his mission on earth. A memorable ending.

Emily O'Leary
Emily O'Leary(@emily-oleary)
1 year ago

This was both lovely and entertaining Sandra! Nice to think that someone might atone even after death and help others do the same, and the comic element really brings it to life!

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Greene M Wills
Greene M Wills(@greene-m-wills)
1 year ago

I loved the idea of an apprentice angel Sandra! It reminded me of Clarence in What a Wonderful Life! Fantastic and very cute!

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Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
1 year ago

I love your story, Sandra! I had a good laugh when I first read that the “I” of the story was the person in the casket. So funny! I also like it that you play with the idea that a person can behave as a saint if only s/he feels that somebody has faith in them.
The detail with the white feather reminded me of the movie Forest Gump, which I watched again a few days ago. It appears both in the beginning and at the end of the movie, symbolizing what? Change? Innocence? Peace? Or the way life is moving around, exposed to the breeze? In your story, it’s a beautiful reminder of the presence of the angel.

Eric Radcliffe
Eric Radcliffe(@eric-radcliffe)
1 year ago

There you go Sandra – how original and funny, and at the same time, you also remind us of the thoughts we have about what happen to us after death ?. I laughed at the thought of Brian opening the hood, that would be enough for me to change my job. Have you seen any feathers since ??

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David Drew
David Drew(@david-drew)
1 year ago

That was a fun take on Angel wings!

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Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
1 year ago

This is a very enjoyable read Sandra, fun and quirky. I’m glad he had the chance to atone, and that he was able to help his friends to become better people in the process and possibly even saving lives. I loved the idea of him leaving a feather, just a little calling card to remind his friends that they’re being watched. Good stuff

Melissa Taggart
Melissa Taggart(@melissa-taggart)
1 year ago

I find this story quite comforting Sandra. I loved the idea that this guy’s story wasn’t concluded after death, he still had a job to do. White speaks to beginnings even though his life had met an end. Great work!

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Brigitta Hegyi
Brigitta Hegyi(@brigitta-hegyi)
1 year ago

Such a lovely story, with funny elements. Great job, Sandra!

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Julie Harris
Julie Harris(@julie-harris)
1 year ago

Congratulations on getting selected as a finalist, Sandra. Not just one story, but two! Wow. You must be so happy. This was a wonderfully enjoyable read!

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 year ago

A very fun and enjoyable read, Sandra. It reminded us about a lot of things, of what is possible to happen to us after we die. Well done. Congratulations.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
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1 year ago

Thank you, Sandra. Yes, Sandra, you’re right.

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