Monster Maelstrom
Daddy, I’m scared.”
The fishing trip on Loch Ness was not going as planned. A thick fog obscured the millpond-still loch, the silence deafening.
“Don’t worry, Jamie, we’ll soon get to shore.”
David rowed harder, trying to look brave for his son. He gripped the oars more tightly, as the boat suddenly sped up. They spun around in an uncontrollable spiral, caught in a dizzying whirlpool.
The boat jolted suddenly to a halt. Clear blue sky and sunshine showed a magnificent sight… a plesiosaur paddling lazily in front of them.
“We found Nessie!” cried Jamie.
“Well, that’s different!” exclaimed David.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleI love the introduction to the story, the way you elegantly put the reader into the situation where the father and son find themselves. There is also a wonderful element of turn around and surprise at the end.
Thank you for reading and commenting Christer. It’s one of the stories where, as you’re writing, you think, ‘Wouldn’t it be amazing if’. Sadly, I don’t think that ‘seeing the loch ness monster’ will ever get ticked off my bucket list. Closest things to monsters I found up there were the midgies!
I like it, Carrie. I like how you introduced to us the story of a father and son with the association to Scottish folklore, the Loch Ness Monster or Nessie. It was a very educational read. You brought us to the place by sharing its folklore stories.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you Lotchie. It’s a beautiful place and the whole area is steeped in history, being near to Culloden. It would be so awesome to actually catch sight of the monster. One day maybe ??
hahahaha lol. I wish you a good luck in catching the monster, Carrie.
Great title! I think anything about Nessie is fascinating.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThanks Danielle. Yes, Nessie is a true inspiration. So many stories could be made around the legend
Now that beats all those fishing stories, you know the ones where the fish grows with each telling and fight harder and harder on the line! Across the other side of the world I’ve always been fascinated by stories of Nessie. Well done!
Heehee, yes, you can’t bag a much bigger catch than a plesiosaur. It’s one of those legends that make you think ‘wouldn’t it be marvellous if… ‘
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