Daddy, I’m scared.”

The fishing trip on Loch Ness was not going as planned. A thick fog obscured the millpond-still loch, the silence deafening.

“Don’t worry, Jamie, we’ll soon get to shore.”

David rowed harder, trying to look brave for his son. He gripped the oars more tightly, as the boat suddenly sped up. They spun around in an uncontrollable spiral, caught in a dizzying whirlpool.

The boat jolted suddenly to a halt. Clear blue sky and sunshine showed a magnificent sight… a plesiosaur paddling lazily in front of them.

“We found Nessie!” cried Jamie.

“Well, that’s different!” exclaimed David.

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Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
1 year ago

I love the introduction to the story, the way you elegantly put the reader into the situation where the father and son find themselves. There is also a wonderful element of turn around and surprise at the end.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 year ago

I like it, Carrie. I like how you introduced to us the story of a father and son with the association to Scottish folklore, the Loch Ness Monster or Nessie. It was a very educational read. You brought us to the place by sharing its folklore stories.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
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1 year ago

hahahaha lol. I wish you a good luck in catching the monster, Carrie.

Danielle Burke
Danielle Burke(@danielle-burke)
1 year ago

Great title! I think anything about Nessie is fascinating.

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Sandra James
Sandra James(@sandra-james)
1 year ago

Now that beats all those fishing stories, you know the ones where the fish grows with each telling and fight harder and harder on the line! Across the other side of the world I’ve always been fascinated by stories of Nessie. Well done!

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