He’d fooled everyone with his angelic face and innocent expression.  Who would suspect that such a perfect child could be anything but… perfect?  In his parent’s eyes, he could do no wrong.  But theirs weren’t the only eyes watching him.

A series of unspeakable acts would define his youth.  Acts for which he received neither blame nor punishment.  Standing before the ornate mirror in his family’s hallway he would smirk, reveling in his deception.  And with each smirk, a tiny crack would form on the glass.

His father’s tragic fall from a clifftop, whilst they hiked together, had assured him a place at university.  The proceeds from an Accidental Death policy covered his fees and spared him from what he perceived to be a demeaning job within the family’s fast-food restaurant.  Meanwhile another crack would be etched.

Sarah was beautiful and utterly irresistible.  But it was the plain and dull Katherine who held the key to his aspirations and a future within her prominent and influential family.  It would be Katherine on his arm the night of the graduation ball while Sarah sat at home, anxiously awaiting his arrival, until all hope was gone and only tears remained.  And with them… another crack.

It was during his gap year that he planned his mother’s demise.  His inheritance would provide the financial security he desperately craved and secure the acceptance of Katherine’s family and circle of friends.  Admiring himself in the mirror whilst basking in his ingenuity, another ugly smirk crossed his lips.

The sound was almost indiscernible at first before reaching a crescendo as crack after crack elongated, frenziedly gouging its wrath deep into the glass.  Each crack a testimony to his every despicable act.  Defiling every inch, until the glass could withstand no more.

His distraught mother, when questioned by the police, had no explanation for how a shard of glass had punctured the jugular vein in her son’s neck.

While in the hallway, the lifeless body of a young man reflected in an ornate mirror… a mirror with eyes to the soul, unsullied and completely devoid of cracks.

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Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
1 year ago

Oh, I do like that Linda, very tense and well written. Your story gripped me, right to the very last word.

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
Reply to  Linda Rock
1 year ago

It reminded me, in some respects, of ‘The Picture of Dorian Grey’. I love that you made the story your own though. I’ve never been fond of mirrors anyway, so your story works better for me!

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Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
Reply to  Linda Rock
1 year ago

LOL, I hadn’t noticed Greene’s comment. Great minds!

Sandra James
Sandra James(@sandra-james)
1 year ago

I really enjoyed it, Linda. I got madder and madder at this obnoxious man, then rejoiced at the conclusion. Very well done 🙂

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Greene M Wills
Greene M Wills(@greene-m-wills)
1 year ago

Fantastic Linda! I loved the way you pictured this psycho and his horrible actions. It made me think of the Picture of Dorian Gray, except that nobody painted this one, except for your inspired narrative. Well done!

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Fuji
Fuji(@fuji)
1 year ago

What a great story, Linda. As you said, this time the evil one got his comeuppance! I do love that word, comeuppance, by the way. Now we all feel vindicated! Your stories never cease to entertain.

Genya Johnson
Genya Johnson(@genya-johnson)
1 year ago

This really hooked me from the beginning and kept me engaged all the way through. Deep and dark. Mirrors always have that effect on me. Loved the story and the ending.

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Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
1 year ago

A different take on the Dorian Gray theme. The result, with the mirror taking revenge on the young man after his evil actions, feels satisfying. A great story, Linda! Did you notice that Sandra (in Broccoli and Magic Unicorns), you and I all have used the name Sara/Sarah in our Mystery stories? Isn’t that mysterious?

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Clare Marsh
Clare Marsh(@clare-marsh)
1 year ago

Powerful writing! And I’m relieved that the protagonist got the end he so richly deserved!

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 year ago

Very good story, Linda. I love it. The tension you build up from start to finish is wonderfully impressive. You really always give great stories for us (readers). Nicely done.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
Reply to  Linda Rock
1 year ago

You’re welcome, Linda.

Thompson Emate
Thompson Emate(@thompson-emate)
1 year ago

Wow! Linda, I love this story. It’s like watching a thriller movie down your spine. I don’t understand the last paragraph. Can you shed more light?

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Thompson Emate
Thompson Emate(@thompson-emate)
Reply to  Linda Rock
1 year ago

Wow! It does. Thank you.

Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse(@marianna-pieterse)
1 year ago

Linda, this is a very captivating story. It has great tension. I got very upset with your protagonist ?

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Fuji
Fuji(@fuji)
11 months ago

Wow, Linda, your story and picture are the cover of the new eBook. That is quite an honor. I thoroughly enjoyed reading your story again. Happy Holidays to you and yours. Do you have snow in your part of the world?

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Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
11 months ago

Congratulations, Linda, for having two stories in the new Voice.club publication and for supplying the collection with title and picture. It’s a good choice by the administration! Your stories are always fascinating.

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