Ju-long raced through the bustling marketplace, “Mei, he’s done it. Come on!”

The two children ran, bursting with excitement, to their mentor’s laboratory. Qing was absent.

“I can’t believe he finally found the secret. Has he really found a way to live forever?”

A grey powder sat in a dish amongst jars labelled as sulphur, charcoal and saltpetre. “Is that it?” Mei poked her finger into it and took a tentative sniff, nose wrinkling.

The door banged open and Mei jumped, knocking the dish flying towards the open fire.

“Duck!” screamed Qing as the room ignited in sparkling white light.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
10 months ago

I love it, Carrie. I don’t know if I will laugh or I will cry for your protagonist. Their experiment is too dangerous – a mixture of sulphur, charcoal, and saltpetre will create gunpowder that will explode. I like the courage and fortitude of your protagonist, I see that they will be great scientists one day. It was a nice read. Nicely written, Carrie.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
10 months ago
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You’re welcome, Carrie. Oh! I am sorry to miss the history of the Qing dynasty, Carrie.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
10 months ago
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Wow! That’s cool. You are so knowledgeable, Carrie. You are one of the members here that I always admire because of your character, your talents and your knowledge. I am happy to be here in the Voice club because I am learning many things.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
10 months ago
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Julie Harris
Julie Harris (@julie-harris)
10 months ago

This story was great, Carrie, and based loosely on history, I think. As you said, the alchemists were trying for immortality, but it exploded on them! And fireworks were invented in China during the Qing dynasty. Nice weaving of fact and fiction!

Juma
Juma (@juma)
10 months ago

A very enjoyable story, Carrie, with a bit of history thrown in. Good read and very appropriate for just after the American 4th of July celebration. We had fireworks well into the night on the 4th and 5th.

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Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof (@christer-norrlof)
9 months ago

You have succeeded with a difficult task, Carrie: to write a story which is filled both with action and information. I had never heard before that this is how fireworks was invented. Also your title is a different one. We were talking about finding titles that stand out and are easily remembered. This is a good example of that.

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