My feet danced merrily and my smile illuminated my whole flat when I saw the invitation addressed to me, Miss Elowina Carmichael. A “gold ticket” to the most exclusive club, hosted by the Trillions, one of the richest families in the universe!

Two weeks later, I was all in a dither deciding what to wear. Diamonds or pearls?

Behind a crowd of guests, I entered the luxurious night club. The Trillion family greeted individuals with excessive loudness. “Lady Jane, darling so lovely to see you… Dowager Paula, you look divine….Lord Thomas, welcome, welcome.” Distracted, the Trillions turned away from me.

The live band played furiously, encouraging females high on laughter to grab each other’s hands and head for the dance floor. My best friend Grace sashayed past me. I blew her a forgiveness kiss realizing that she did not see me under the strobe lights. Rushing onto the dance floor, I seemed to run straight into a waiter carrying a tray of champagne. After apologising, I reached for one, but he turned sharply to his left. No matter, too early to drink bubbly. Impossible to join the ladies’ dance circle. Determined to have fun, I swayed, twirled, glided alone around the room empowered by the retro music.

In the elegant bathroom, I patted my hair in place. Looking at the mirror, my hand came to a abrupt halt and a lump formed in my throat. My reflection was not there. Not there! Then, laughing uproariously I suspected it was a trick mirror. The youngest Trillion son loved pranks.

Servants in livery opened the grand double doors as the aroma of oysters, lobster and salmon wafted tantalizing in the air. Hurrying into the banquet hall I saw that I was placed between the handsome Wintree twins. My favourites! Strangely, they talked around me. Oh, they do so love to tease me!

To instant silence, Mr. Trillion rose champagne glass in hand. “A toast to absent friends. Sadly, I must inform you that the lovely Elowina Carmichael was tragically killed in a car wreck this morning.”

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    Lotchie Carmelo
    Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
    2 years ago

    Hello, Margarida. This story is awesome. And I never expected the twist in the ending. That was too surprising. Good job.

    Lotchie Carmelo
    Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
    Reply to  Margarida Brei
    8 months ago

    You’re most welcome.

    Carrie OLeary
    Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
    2 years ago

    A nice lead up to the twist at the end. I did wonder if she was a ghost and no one can see her. One would hope the girls high on laughter didn’t realise their friend had died. If they did, I’d haunt them forever more if I were her.

    Linda Rock
    Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
    8 months ago

    Your story reminded me of the movie ‘The Sixth Sense’, Margarida, a favourite of mine. It wasn’t until the waiter turning sharply away that I ‘sensed’ poor Elowina was a ghost. I love how her personality shines through during the evening, so much so that when the announcement of her death is made, I felt quite sad. Very cleverly written and a really enjoyable read.

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