The blue ceramic jar sat, the centerpiece of the dining room table, its lid nowhere to be found.  What had once been filled with heavenly pieces of gooey, chocolaty delight now contained nothing but the dusting of a few crumbs.  The signs were clear: a terrible crime had taken place.

The suspects were gathered into the room and each given a chance to defend their claimed innocence.  Among them stood Mama, a woman whose strength—especially with a slipper in hand—made up for her lack of height.  If she was not the culprit, justice would most definitely be served to whoever was.  On her right stood Thomas, the firstborn son.  Though his track record suggested this crime was beneath him, there was a devious side to Thomas that was not to be overlooked.  But his younger brother, Timmy, was the more likely suspect.  He had yet to reach the age of self-control and was a known troublemaker in this household.

And finally, towering over the rest, stood Papa.  His oversized belly was a constant reminder of the man’s love for desserts of all kinds.  Entire birthday cakes shook in fear at his presence.  It would come as no surprise to anyone if Papa had been the thief.

The only problem: he had an alibi.  And so did Timmy, and Thomas, and Mama.  The four of them surrounded the empty jar, accusing each other of a crime none of them committed.  They were locked in an argument that would end up nowhere.  As I watched these events unfold from the comfort of my pink plastic high chair—which was coincidentally seated just inches from the dessert cabinet—I brushed a crumb from my cheek, erasing the last trace of those delicious chocolate chip cookies.

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Sandra James
Sandra James(@sandra-james)
1 year ago

A wonderful ending to a great story filled with fabulous images. I can picture them all and especially loved ‘Entire birthday cakes shook in fear at his presence’ and the casual ‘which was coincidentally situated just inches from the dessert cabinet’ when the mystery becomes clear. Very well done 🙂

Sandra James
Sandra James(@sandra-james)
Reply to  Jessica Lee
1 year ago

I feel honoured to have made your first comment, Jessica! I can see Fuji has also commented now and I’m sure there will be many more. I am very glad you feel encouraged to write more. I finished my very first short story many years ago after someone took the time and interest to ask how it was going. This is a competition but more importantly, Voice.club is a wonderful nurturing community full of support 🙂
PS – My daughter’s name is also Jessica – the mother of the little girl with me in the avatar  ? 

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Fuji
Fuji(@fuji)
1 year ago

Welcome to Voice Club, Jessica. You already fit right in, with your wonderful imagination and your expert way of telling a story. I did not see that end coming. That little one will most likely succeed in life – if she doesn’t get caught, that is! I assume baby/toddler is a “she” because of the pink high chair, by the way. You have so many nice touches to fill us in and help us get to know the characters in a very few well-chosen words. Great work!

Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
1 year ago

Welcome to Voice Club, Jessica! I very much enjoyed your story and know what it feels like to have your first story published and commented on. I hope you feel encouraged to continue writing. I like the way you tell the story and your sense of humor with all the little details about the persons involved.

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Clare Marsh
Clare Marsh(@clare-marsh)
1 year ago

I really enjoyed this and enjoyed the who dunnit over who had eaten the cookies! It’s always the one that looks innocent!

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
1 year ago

Hi Jessica and welcome to Voice.club. This story is wonderful, very engaging and your descriptions kept me smiling throughout. Fabulous twist at the end with the completely unsuspected baby being the culprit. Great stuff!

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
1 year ago

Hello, Jessica. A warm welcome to Voice club. You’re good at writing, Jessica. I liked it so much. And the nice twist of your story. I didn’t expect the baby to be the culprit. That was a fun read. Good job.

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