It’s Murder in the Aquarium—fish are mysteriously vanishing. The Prime Suspects, a shoal of vicious tiger barbs, await exile in a bucket in the bathroom. Two die of cold—well, they had it coming. But back in the tank, another guppy is missing. Is a serial killer still lurking among the fissures of improbable coral?

Who dunnit? It can’t be the barbs in the bath with their watertight alibi. Suspicion falls next on Fred the Plec—he sounds like a mobster, but he’s toothless. Jason the Eel? He’s a slippery customer. Perhaps it’s Percy the Puffer Fish who dispatches frozen cockles with ruthless efficiency and a manic grin?

Could the killer be Jose the Mexican axolotl? Surely not as his dorsal fin looks nicked. But on closer scrutiny, a tiny flapping tail protrudes from the inscrutable mouth of this ambiguous amphibian.  He shoots us an innocent glance, who me guv? Then gulps down the guppy, swallows the evidence, avoiding the scales of justice.

No way, Jose.

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Sandra James
Sandra James(@sandra-james)
10 months ago

A wonderful fun story, Clare! I can see them all so clearly, especially the look on Jose’s face. I’ve just woken on the first day of yet another covid-lockdown here in Australia so it was great to start the day with a smile and a laugh 🙂 Well done!

Sandra James
Sandra James(@sandra-james)
10 months ago
Reply to  Clare Marsh

Sad for the fish and I’m sure your son was very disappointed but isn’t it wonderful how those incidents can inspire stories?

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
10 months ago

This is a very well worded and clever little story Clare. You made me smile too at the end of a very long day. Very nicely done!

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Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
10 months ago

With the utmost respect for the poor fish who lost their lives in the making of this story, it put a huge smile on my face Clare. Love the line ‘He shoots us an innocent glance, who me guv?’ Just the tonic we need right now.  ? 

Fuji
Fuji(@fuji)
10 months ago

I loved this clever and entertaining story, Clare. The picture first drew me in – it is so whimsical and splashed with color! I like the way you use words, with so many subtle witticisms – the “fissures” of improbably coral, “barbs in the bath”, “watertight alibi”, “scales of justice”. You really have a feel for the written word, and a wonderful sense of humor. Welcome to Voice Club! I can’t wait to read more of your stories in the future.

Jessica Lee
Jessica Lee(@jessica-lee)
10 months ago

The plot of my own mystery submission, “Cookie Monster,” is actually quite similar to yours! It is so wonderful to read another who-ate-it? story that ends with a character getting away with their evil crime!

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Alan Kemister
Alan Kemister(@alan-kemister)
10 months ago

Well done, really cute story. Jose needs to get a good lawyer. He could probably get off by accusing the fish of speciesism, picking on him just because he was an amphibian.

Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
10 months ago

Welcome to Voice.club, Clare and congratulations to a great story! I laughed out loud when I read about the crime and its circumstances. The suspected individuals were hilariously described with their names and looks, and the outcome with all its little details so well presented.
Reading your comments, I was reminded of an aquarium we had when I was a child. There too, little guppy children were eaten. However, it was evident “in flagrante delicto” that the murderer and cannibal was their own father! And not even the mother of their children moved a fin to stop him!

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
10 months ago

Welcome to Voice club, Clare. What a very entertaining story. You got me chuckles. Congratulations on a very well-done story. 

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