Aya was only eight years old. Then one day, she and her friends suddenly agreed to take a bath in a 12-foot deep river. They were all happy jumping and swimming in the deep river until an accident took away everyone’s happiness.

Aya was drowning.  She did not have the strength to swim anymore and just watched the light as she felt her heartbeat gradually slow down.

There was no hope for living until she saw a hand in the middle of that light; that hand pulled her from under the water.

She breathed and lived.

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    Fuji
    Fuji(@fuji)
    2 years ago

    What a beautiful story, Lotchie. After all your loving and supportive comments to so many people, it is very exciting to see your first published story. It sounds like little Aya might have a “guardian angel” that watches over her. I’m glad she is safe now. I look forward to more of your stories!

    Carrie OLeary
    Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
    2 years ago

    Hi Lotchie, I’m so glad your story had a happy ending. It’s lovely to see stories from new writers, and you’ve been with us for some time now giving us all kind comments. Well done ?

    Linda Rock
    Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
    2 years ago

    Congratulations on your first published story Lotchie, it’s so good to read something from you. And what a lovely story it is, the hand in the light leads me to believe that it wasn’t Aya’s time to die and a power greater than ourselves saved her. Well done!

    Sandra James
    Sandra James(@sandra-james)
    2 years ago

    Congratulations from me, too, Lotchie! As Fuji said, you have made so many kind comments and it is wonderful to see a story from you. The first of many, I hope 🙂
    And… what a wonderful story. My heart was pounding, willing someone to rescue her and you finished it perfectly.  ? 

    Juma
    Juma(@juma)
    Reply to  Lotchie Carmelo
    2 years ago

    We’re all very glad that you overcame your fears and doubts, Lotchie, and found the courage to enter your story. As you can see by the response, we all love it! Believe it or not, we all have those same fears and doubts about our own writing. It’s part of being a writer, part of being an artist. Welcome to the club of fearless writers!

    Thompson Emate
    Thompson Emate(@thompson-emate)
    2 years ago

    It’s so nice to read your story Lotchie. When I saw it, I didn’t waste any time reading it. I’m glad little Aya was rescued. I’m glad she survived. Thanks to the hand that came to her rescue. It must be divine.

    Chris
    Chris(@chris)
    2 years ago

    Nice story Lotchie, perfect picture, and good outcome with a positive ending. Sometimes we all need a helping hand!

    Christer Norrlof
    Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
    2 years ago

    Like the other readers, I am happy to finally see a story written by you, Lotchie, after all your kind and generous comments for us. It is a wondrous story, with a miraculously happy outcome. Just out of curiosity: I checked your presentation of yourself where you wrote that you are a member of the indigenous people in the Philippines. I take it that you have another mother language and that it… Read more »

    Christer Norrlof
    Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
    Reply to  Lotchie Carmelo
    2 years ago

    Interesting, Lotchie. To a foreigner, your language situation seems very complicated. You have to master several languages in order to communicate with people in your world, and English isn’t even one of them. In that perspective, your way of writing English is impressive. I hope and think that Voice.club is a good help for you.

    Marianna Pieterse
    Marianna Pieterse(@marianna-pieterse)
    2 years ago

    Lotchie, this is a beautiful story. I am so happy that the little girl was saved in the end. It was a very captivating scene. Congratulations on your first story. I look forward to reading more from you.

    Carrie OLeary
    Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
    2 years ago

    Well done Lotchie, getting placed in your first competition is a wonderful achievement.

    Linda Rock
    Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
    2 years ago

    Congratulations Lotchie, so pleased for you.

    Melissa Taggart
    Melissa Taggart(@melissa-taggart)
    2 years ago

    Such a lovely story, Lotchie! The ending was perfect. I think you should be very proud of yourself. I also want to take the time to thank you for all the lovely comments you have given me. I can’t wait to see what you come up with next, keep up the good work!

    Melissa Taggart
    Melissa Taggart(@melissa-taggart)
    Reply to  Lotchie Carmelo
    2 years ago

    Lotchie, you are one of the brightest of lights within this group. We all appreciate you! ? Congratulations once again!

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