A Light to Life
Aya was only eight years old. Then one day, she and her friends suddenly agreed to take a bath in a 12-foot deep river. They were all happy jumping and swimming in the deep river until an accident took away everyone’s happiness.
Aya was drowning. She did not have the strength to swim anymore and just watched the light as she felt her heartbeat gradually slow down.
There was no hope for living until she saw a hand in the middle of that light; that hand pulled her from under the water.
She breathed and lived.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleWhat a beautiful story, Lotchie. After all your loving and supportive comments to so many people, it is very exciting to see your first published story. It sounds like little Aya might have a “guardian angel” that watches over her. I’m glad she is safe now. I look forward to more of your stories!
Thank you so much for reading and commenting on my story Fuji. I’m glad you liked it. I’m not really a good writer like you and many here but thank you all for inspiring me and sharing your writing knowledge. I learned a lot here. I was a bit nervous when this story was published but thanks to the Voice club for improving my English and grammar. Yes, I also think that… Read more »
Hi Lotchie, I’m so glad your story had a happy ending. It’s lovely to see stories from new writers, and you’ve been with us for some time now giving us all kind comments. Well done ?
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you so much for taking the time to read and give your feedback on my story, Carrie.
Congratulations on your first published story Lotchie, it’s so good to read something from you. And what a lovely story it is, the hand in the light leads me to believe that it wasn’t Aya’s time to die and a power greater than ourselves saved her. Well done!
Thanks, Linda. Maybe you are right. Because until now, no one still knows who rescued Aya because the people with her bathing in the river are the same age as her.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleCongratulations from me, too, Lotchie! As Fuji said, you have made so many kind comments and it is wonderful to see a story from you. The first of many, I hope 🙂
And… what a wonderful story. My heart was pounding, willing someone to rescue her and you finished it perfectly. ?
Thank you so much for all your kind words, Sandra. Making it was not so easy; I need to defeat my fears and doubt. I’m afraid that the readers won’t like it, but I keep telling myself: “how do I know if they’ll like it or not if I don’t try. There’s nothing to lose.” Thank you again. ?
We’re all very glad that you overcame your fears and doubts, Lotchie, and found the courage to enter your story. As you can see by the response, we all love it! Believe it or not, we all have those same fears and doubts about our own writing. It’s part of being a writer, part of being an artist. Welcome to the club of fearless writers!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThanks for the kind and encouraging words, Juma. And thank you also for liking my humble story. You and the rest here; play a big role in why I did it. Thank you. I return the compliment to you all. I am happy that I made it, Juma.
It’s so nice to read your story Lotchie. When I saw it, I didn’t waste any time reading it. I’m glad little Aya was rescued. I’m glad she survived. Thanks to the hand that came to her rescue. It must be divine.
I smiled when I read that you didn’t hesitate to read my little story when you saw it, Thompson. Thank you so much for spending your time to read and giving a wonderful comment. I’m so glad you liked my story.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleNice story Lotchie, perfect picture, and good outcome with a positive ending. Sometimes we all need a helping hand！
Thank you so much, Chris. I am happy that you also liked it.
Yes, I agree. We all need a helping hand.
Like the other readers, I am happy to finally see a story written by you, Lotchie, after all your kind and generous comments for us. It is a wondrous story, with a miraculously happy outcome. Just out of curiosity: I checked your presentation of yourself where you wrote that you are a member of the indigenous people in the Philippines. I take it that you have another mother language and that it… Read more »
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you so much for reading and commenting Christer. It makes my heart very happy. Yes, Christer. You read about me correctly. I am a proud member of an Indigent Subanen people. About the language we used to speak daily, it is very different from the language of the Philippines which is known as Tagalog, and there is also Cebuana / Bisaya in part of Visayas and Mindanao. We have here different… Read more »
Interesting, Lotchie. To a foreigner, your language situation seems very complicated. You have to master several languages in order to communicate with people in your world, and English isn’t even one of them. In that perspective, your way of writing English is impressive. I hope and think that Voice.club is a good help for you.
Yes, Christer, I am happy to see the voice club, I have mastered my English language, and I have learned a lot from here.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleLotchie, this is a beautiful story. I am so happy that the little girl was saved in the end. It was a very captivating scene. Congratulations on your first story. I look forward to reading more from you.
Thank you, Marianna. I’m also glad you liked my little story. My heart is glad to read your comment.
Well done Lotchie, getting placed in your first competition is a wonderful achievement.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you so much, Carrie. I can’t believe it. Thank you all for the support, encouragement, and motivation. I owe a lot to all of you.
Congratulations Lotchie, so pleased for you.
Thank you so much, Linda. You play a big part in it. I learn a lot from you too. Thank you for everything.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleSuch a lovely story, Lotchie! The ending was perfect. I think you should be very proud of yourself. I also want to take the time to thank you for all the lovely comments you have given me. I can’t wait to see what you come up with next, keep up the good work!
Thanks a lot, Melissa. I am forever grateful. Thanks also for the encouragement and for what I learned from you. You deserved all the lovely comments, Melissa.
Lotchie, you are one of the brightest of lights within this group. We all appreciate you! ? Congratulations once again!
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