I can feel the cold from the window, but still I refrain from closing the curtains. To block out the raindrop trails and to mute the storm would be to tempt fate.

I sit wrapped in a blanket staring out of the window, waiting for his headlights to turn into our driveway. The news continues in the background. An accident on the A4.

Relief engulfs me. I focus on the yellow glow the headlights create. My brain refuses to register the blue flashing lights.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
1 month ago

Hello, Mary. Is this a true story of your life? Is one of your family members involved in a road accident at A4?

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Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
1 month ago
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I see, Mary. No. you do not have to say sorry; it is still nice and a little confusing. But I like how you opened up your story: “I can feel the cold from the window.” I feel like I am in the story too. Good job.

Fuji
Fuji (@fuji)
1 month ago

A very well-written story, Mary, which reflects the anxiety many of us feel when a loved one is late arriving as expected. I was bowled over by the ending.

Juma
Juma (@juma)
1 month ago

I have lived this scene so many times, even down to the idea of not wanting to tempt fate. I think all mothers and fathers could identify with this story, even though you don’t say whether your protagonist is waiting for a son, a husband, or perhaps even a brother. Thank heavens my anxious waits have always had happy endings. Excellent writing, Mary.

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Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof (@christer-norrlof)
1 month ago

I like the way you avoid going into details about what happened and that the waiting person all the time is unaware of what’s going on, although the radio gives a hint. Also that she refused to take in the flashing, blue light outside the window. This is what happens when amnesia strikes and, in a way, it’s interesting that the brain does that.

Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse (@marianna-pieterse)
1 month ago

Mary this is such a sad story I think many people can relate to the anxious feeling of waiting for someone who is running late. Really well told.

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Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary (@carrie-oleary)
1 month ago

You’ve expressed the anxiety that anyone with a loved one who is running late feels really well. A heart rending ending; that your protagonist blocked out what was really happening, their sense of relief when they see the glow of headlights, is utterly believable. Well done.

Linda Rock
Linda Rock (@linda-rock)
1 month ago

How often does our brain refuse to accept what is right in front of us? It’s a form of self-protection, for to accept what we see or know would mean losing all hope. You expressed this and so much more in so few words Mary. Really well written.

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Thompson Emate
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29 days ago

Waiting for a loved one who is due to have arrived and hasn’t could stir so much anxiety. Worst still is if the person can’t be reached on phone. Well crafted story.

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