”It’s the only key there is!” he was warned. “Be very careful!”
And yet, after a long walk along the lazy, meandering river, it was mysteriously gone.

Immediately, he turned around, retracing his steps. Nothing! Back again. And then again. It was getting late and panic was dancing over the darkening water.

When the time came to give up, he closed his eyes, took a deep breath and whispered, “Please, Spirit, show me.”
Like a miniature comet, a beam of light shot into the high grass, bounced on the tiny metal object, and joyfully threw itself into his opening eye.

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Voice-Team (@voice-team)
5 months ago

In this story, light is magic, the “miniature comet” that reveals the lost object. Very visual with a strong finish. 

Fuji
Fuji (@fuji)
5 months ago

A very appealing story, Christer. We’ve all been there, with the lost key! When you have a guardian angel, even keys can be found!

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary (@carrie-oleary)
5 months ago

I can remember having to wear my front door key on a chain around my neck when I was at school because my parents both finished work at least a couple of hours after I finished school. Unfortunately, little girls liked doing handstands and cartwheels on the school field during lunch and break times. I could have done with a guiding light that day because I didn’t half get into trouble! The key never did turn up!

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Thompson Emate (@thompson-emate)
5 months ago

I love this story. Despite being short, I read some lines over and over again. It looks like a real encounter that”s made fiction. I like the figurative use of words mostly, ‘panic was dancing over the darkening water.’

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
5 months ago

An uplifting story of faith and trust in the Divine Spirit. I love it, Christer. Excellent.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
5 months ago

You’re welcome, Christer.

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Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse (@marianna-pieterse)
5 months ago

Christer, I can relate to that feeling of panic when you’ve lost your keys. I’ve said many prayers especially on my way out the door to go to work when I couldn’t find either my car keys or my house keys!

Susan Dawson
Susan Dawson (@susan-dawson)
5 months ago

My first thought was ‘unlikely’, but then I thought how fortunately and unbelievably those frantic searches often do eventually turn up the missing thing as if by some sort of imaginary magic light. I was on a big search for my posh pen this morning, and it literally seemed to beam down in front of me.

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary (@carrie-oleary)
5 months ago

Congratulations Christer, a great story that many of us can relate to.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
5 months ago

Congratulation on your win, Christer. Well done for a very nice story.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
5 months ago

You’re welcome.

Melissa Taggart
Melissa Taggart (@melissa-taggart)
5 months ago

A great story, Christer! There is no other panic like the one we experience when our keys have been lost. This is something we can all relate to. Congratulations!

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Melissa Taggart (@melissa-taggart)
5 months ago

Losing a wallet or purse would be exponentially worse! We keep all of our ID’s and lives in them. Did you ever get your wallet back?

I locked my keys in my house recently and had to “break in” to my own home via the living room window. My teenage children got a kick out of it. Me? Not so much. ? 

Linda Rock
Linda Rock (@linda-rock)
5 months ago

Congratulations Christer. I lost my keys a few weeks ago, panic stricken for hours. Thankfully they were handed in! So I could totally relate to your story.

Linda Rock
Linda Rock (@linda-rock)
5 months ago

Just read your reply to Melissa, Christer, it’s almost like your wallet was destined to disappear! I can imagine your wife was quite distraught. Going back to my keys, I live in a gated community so my keyring held the fob to the electric gates, front and back doors, windows and mailbox. It also held a pink replica lego brick with the words ‘Nanny P’ which my grandson had bought me. I think whoever handed them in probably had sympathy for the ‘poor old lady’ owner!

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Thompson Emate
Thompson Emate (@thompson-emate)
5 months ago

Congratulations Christer! A well deserved win.

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