She raced with her friends. Turning and spinning, she was having fun. They were all around her in their distinct sizes.

Much to her chagrin, she could see a reflection of different colours of light. She shot up to take a clear view of the display. It was breathtaking. She was lost in the view.

“Hey! Over there!” A man shouted.

A light beamed towards her direction. They saw her. Quickly, she plunged back into the water. She swam back home sad and dejected. She wished she could join the spectators on land.

Two worlds. One visible, the other veiled.

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Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary (@carrie-oleary)
1 month ago

Interesting story Thompson. The world above must look very different from underwater, I imagine she would be rather captivated by the fireworks. Nicely done.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
1 month ago

Very interesting and intriguing, Thompson. I wonder what kind of underwater creature that is. If mermaid or what? But one thing for sure, I’m sure their underwater world is different. Hopefully, she liked the view on the ground and the fireworks.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
1 month ago
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You’re welcome, Thompson.

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Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse (@marianna-pieterse)
1 month ago

Thompson, this story reminded me again how human beings, when they do not understand another creature or being, can turn out to be quite cruel, out of fear. I think people are just as captivated by the beauty underneath the water.

Fuji
Fuji (@fuji)
1 month ago

Hi Thompson – I think this is one of your best stories so far. It can be read on many different levels, each of them satisfying, each of them opening questions for discussion. I never even thought of mermaids until Lotchie mentioned them, but now I like that interpretation a lot. My original take was that the little girl was from a poor family, not invited to the fireworks, which were for the rich kids. Now your comments indicate the swimmers were not quite human – like us, and yet different. A very intriguing story. Excellent job!

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