The Candlemaker’s Daughter
Deep in the Black Forest lived a beautiful young girl named Anneliese. Her father made candles and her mother baked the best Hutzelbrot in the village. Their home was a happy one – full of light, the scent of baking, the sound of laughter. Anneliese even had a handsome suitor named Stefan who adored her and brought her armfuls of flowers from his lush garden.
But nothing was good enough for Anneliese. One suitor wouldn’t do; she wanted every man in town to notice her. Mere candles weren’t enough light, she wanted the very sun to surround her like a halo. Instead of just her mother’s delicious bread, Anneliese wanted banquets to be held in her honor.
One day she managed to slip away from her home to the hidden hut of the Hexenmeister. “Make me famous,” she begged. “Make people gasp at my blinding beauty. Make all the villagers think of me every hour of every day.”
The Hexenmeister turned her this way and that. “You are indeed beautiful,” he said, “but your homespun clothes and your ugly shoes won’t do.” He waved his wand and a cobbler appeared, carrying slippers made of fairy glass. Another wave of the wand brought a seamstress with a dress of gossamer silk made of starlight and moonbeams. “Now we can proceed!” He sent out an invitation to everyone in the village.
The next day at dawn, the villagers gathered under the Clock Tower in the town square, awaiting the Hexenmeister’s surprise. When the chimes struck the hour, the little platform swung open. Instead of the hand-carved cuckoo that used to greet them, the villagers saw a lovely princess, haloed by the early-morning sun.
The crowd gasped. “What a beautiful doll!” “It almost looks real!” “Our village clock will be famous.” And they brought fruits and hams and cakes and breads for a celebratory feast. Only Stefan recognized Anneliese. He could see the terror in her eyes, and even above the noise of the crowd, could hear her tiny voice crying, “Please, help me!” But he was powerless, also frozen by the sorcerer’s spell.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleA fairy-tale-like narrative with a chilling, cautionary conclusion. Lots of traditional story elements made new for us. Great use of setting! Well written with a lot of foreshadowing. We had to go back, re-read and enjoy all the hints we were given.

Oh dear, what an awful situation for Anneliese to get herself into. Interesting story, Fuji, well done.
Thank you Carrie! Anneliese certainly got her wishes, didn’t she?
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleBrrr. A spooky tale, totally portraying the world of the Black Forest. I’d love to know what inspired this story. It’s almost a cautionary tale, like Aesop’s fables. Good work!
I’ve always loved tales of the Black Forest, so I’d say that was the inspiration for the story. It originally had quite a different ending, where Anneliese triumphed in her egotistical pursuits. But somehow the story rewrote itself when I got onto the keyboard. Aesop’s spirit lives on!
Admittedly, I am not empathetic towards Anneliese. Her vanity and desire for celebrity status caused her to become part of a clockwork display. So the moral of the story is be satisfied with your own beauty! Good cautionary tale, Fuji.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleYes, Anneliese is a “piece of work” as the Brits would say. Be careful what you ask for, you just might get it!
The nice message of your story, Fuji, reminded me that we should love and be content with what we have. Anneliese shouldn’t have wanted more beauty because she is already beautiful. I love it. Interesting story.
Thank you, Lotchie. Yes the message is truly to be content. Candles for light, delicious homemade bread, a family who loves you, a suitor who brings flowers – sounds like a good life to me!
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Congratulations to an absolutely marvelous story, Fuji! Already the first paragraph, with its German setting and masterfully painted ambiance in just a few brushstrokes, is as perfectly created as a story by the Grimm brothers. The morality is also classical, since the poor girl unfortunately got what she was craving. Excellent job!
Thank you so much Christer. Your enthusiasm is always so encouraging! I loved doing the research for this story. I was already a fan of the Black Forest, but I ran across an article about the world’s biggest cuckoo clock, which is in the Black Forest of course, and I was hooked. This story also gave me a chance to use one of my favorite German words, “Hexenmeister” which I learned years… Read more »
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleBe careful what you wish for! I doubt anyone would have sympathy for Anneliese except for poor Stefan. She got what she deserved and I hope he found a true love to appreciate him. Well done, Fuji!
Thank you so much, Sandra!
Magic, mystery,and a spell-casting wizard- the story has it all to scare and to bewilder. Great, Fuji!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you, Dipayan!
I absolutely loved this story, Fuji!! The setting and narration are so much like one of the Grimm bros’ stories. Your story shows how some people are never happy with what they have and they expect more and more and more. There are so many lessons to be learned there from a reader’s point of view. I just wonder if later on the Hexenmeister was willing to show what he did to… Read more »
Your comment was so encouraging and supportive, Greene. Thanks!! Hopefully the villagers will realize and reflect and learn. I don’t think the Hexenmeister will tell them, though! He’s too busy with his hexes!!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleFuji, I love your solution to how she got her just desserts. I will now think back to my visit to the cuckoo clock factory deep in the Black Forest with new eyes.
Oh my gosh, Susan, you’ve seen the Black Forest cuckoo clocks? I read about the largest one in the world, like a little house. Tell us what you saw there, please?
Fuji, you never cease to amaze me with all your fantastic stories. This is well deserved, congratulations!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleI’m in good company with you, dear Melissa!
Congratulations on your runner up place Fuji. Well done.
Thanks so much, Carrie.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleFuji, this story was such a great “fairytale of horror!” I loved it and the message it conveys. I loved the desperation of Anneliese for attention and worship. “Make all the villagers think of me every hour of every day.” A great story that was well written and vivid with description and emotion. Cheers and congratulations!!!!! Can’t wait to read your next submission!
Hi Heather, dear Grand Prize Winner! Thanks for your comments and for picking up on Annaliese’s wish for people to think of her every hour of every day. I mean, really, what else could the Hexenmeister do to fulfill that wish, except put her in a cuckoo clock? ⏲
Congratulations, Fuji, absolutely well deserved! The Hexenmeister will be pleased!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleAnother well earned success! Congratulations, Fuji!
Super story, Fuji. As others have said, definitely a Grimm vibe, done extremely well.
A nice story, Fuji. That’s a sad one for Anneliese. I hope the Hexenmeister reverts the spell and she learns her lesson. Congratulations on your win.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleCongratulations on your win, Fuji. I am truly happy about your achievement.
It made me very happy to see that this wonderful story as well as your beautiful Doppelgänger-story made their way into this collection. They are both excellent choices by Voice.club, since your works are always extremely well written into the minute details. Your settings, here with the German/Black Forest background and the Venetian/Italian setting in Doppelgänger are superbly crafted with circumstances and linguistic details from those environments. Congratulations, Fuji!
Christer, your comment made my day. Thanks so much for your generous feedback, not just to me, but to so many people. The support we all give each other keeps us creative and productive. I was thrilled to have my two stories included in the new e-book, which is quite beautiful.
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