James just moved to a new neighbourhood. He loves the freshness and fragrance of the surrounding atmosphere which is not in any way compared to where he is coming from. A perfect example of urbanization at its peak. An ideal model of urbanization and its attending problems. At sunset, after the day’s work, he sits on the porch to watch the sun take a sink and the clouds retire into their chambers ushering the star-spangled night sky. A view he most admires. He calls it a view that harnesses his creative prowess from the rind.

Every evening, some metres away he hears sounds of laughter and music. It is like an everyday festivity. At times, he sees people on the porch holding either a plate or a glass cup talking and laughing. Although occasionally he is drawn to the music being played, he still wonders who they are.

Don’t they have other things to do? Why on earth will some people choose to funfair without end? Isn’t there more to life than that? These are his thoughts.

One evening, he decides to move close and have a view. As he draws closer, the sound emanating from the building dwindles. By the time he is fully close, he can not hear any sound. All of a sudden, the door swings open, people rush out like soldiers ready for battle and stand on the porch looking at him. His heart almost jumps out of his mouth. Then they become lifeless like mannequins. He takes to his heels without looking back.

The next day, he can not find the house. It is no more at its usual spot. It has vanished.

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Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
11 months ago

Great story Thompson, and a unique take on the prompt. Lots of clues to keep the reader curious. Nicely done.

Barb Dukeman
Barb Dukeman(@barb-dukeman)
11 months ago

The genuine unease of what’s going on is mesmerizing as it is to James. The lifeless mannequins is a good way of describing the complacency of people in general.

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Dipayan Chakrabarti
Dipayan Chakrabarti(@dipayan-chakrabarti)
11 months ago

Hi Thompson
The twist in the tale that comes right at the end of the story would leave the reader baffled. Great!

Dipayan Chakrabarti
Dipayan Chakrabarti(@dipayan-chakrabarti)
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10 months ago

You’re welcome.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
10 months ago

I can relate to your story, Thompson. But not about the house but the subtle sounds, music, and voices of the people who were partying. We often hear them every Tuesday or Friday until now, here in our area. The neighborhood hears it clearly from almost all of us but, we didn’t see them and we are wondering who they are. But the only thing that is certain it comes from the top of a small mountain with many trees and fairies living. Anyway, I love your story, Thompson, it is unique and interesting. Good job.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
Reply to  Thompson Emate
10 months ago

Yes, they are real. They look like humans, there are also good and there are bad. But the difference is they don’t have philtrum. Many of our tribes have encountered them face to face. But I haven’t seen them yet.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
Reply to  Thompson Emate
10 months ago

Yes. It is.

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