James just moved to a new neighbourhood. He loves the freshness and fragrance of the surrounding atmosphere which is not in any way compared to where he is coming from. A perfect example of urbanization at its peak. An ideal model of urbanization and its attending problems. At sunset, after the day’s work, he sits on the porch to watch the sun take a sink and the clouds retire into their chambers ushering the star-spangled night sky. A view he most admires. He calls it a view that harnesses his creative prowess from the rind.

Every evening, some metres away he hears sounds of laughter and music. It is like an everyday festivity. At times, he sees people on the porch holding either a plate or a glass cup talking and laughing. Although occasionally he is drawn to the music being played, he still wonders who they are.

Don’t they have other things to do? Why on earth will some people choose to funfair without end? Isn’t there more to life than that? These are his thoughts.

One evening, he decides to move close and have a view. As he draws closer, the sound emanating from the building dwindles. By the time he is fully close, he can not hear any sound. All of a sudden, the door swings open, people rush out like soldiers ready for battle and stand on the porch looking at him. His heart almost jumps out of his mouth. Then they become lifeless like mannequins. He takes to his heels without looking back.

The next day, he can not find the house. It is no more at its usual spot. It has vanished.

0 0 votes
Post Rating
Comments without a personalized avatar will not be published.
13 Comments
Oldest
Newest Most Voted
Inline Feedbacks
View all comments
Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary (@carrie-oleary)
6 months ago

Great story Thompson, and a unique take on the prompt. Lots of clues to keep the reader curious. Nicely done.

Barb Dukeman
Barb Dukeman (@barb-dukeman)
6 months ago

The genuine unease of what’s going on is mesmerizing as it is to James. The lifeless mannequins is a good way of describing the complacency of people in general.

Dipayan Chakrabarti
Dipayan Chakrabarti (@dipayan-chakrabarti)
6 months ago

Hi Thompson
The twist in the tale that comes right at the end of the story would leave the reader baffled. Great!

Comments without a personalized avatar will not be published.
Dipayan Chakrabarti
Dipayan Chakrabarti (@dipayan-chakrabarti)
6 months ago
Reply to  Thompson Emate

You’re welcome.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
6 months ago

I can relate to your story, Thompson. But not about the house but the subtle sounds, music, and voices of the people who were partying. We often hear them every Tuesday or Friday until now, here in our area. The neighborhood hears it clearly from almost all of us but, we didn’t see them and we are wondering who they are. But the only thing that is certain it comes from the top of a small mountain with many trees and fairies living. Anyway, I love your story, Thompson, it is unique and interesting. Good job.

Comments without a personalized avatar will not be published.
Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
6 months ago
Reply to  Thompson Emate

Yes, they are real. They look like humans, there are also good and there are bad. But the difference is they don’t have philtrum. Many of our tribes have encountered them face to face. But I haven’t seen them yet.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
6 months ago
Reply to  Thompson Emate

Yes. It is.

Become a PatronHelp support our family-friendly mission

Most Voted Comments

Avatar
8

Bait

It takes a real talent to tell a story in so few words. What was…


Avatar
6

Endure and Sing

Inspirational piece. Am glad you picked the rat to be the protagonist in your story,…


Avatar
6

Endure and Sing

Such a sweet tale - and with a good moral to the story. I thought…


Avatar
5

Endure and Sing

Wow! This is a good story! Really good to read to little kids, the moral…


Avatar
4

Endure and Sing

Hi Katy, it really does add an extra dimension to hear your story read aloud…


Avatar
4

Endure and Sing

In my neighboring country Denmark, we have the classical storyteller Hans-Christian Andersen. Your sweet story…


Avatar
4

Endure and Sing

A really nice one with a wonderful story line. I can see why this was…


Avatar
4

Endure and Sing

A beautiful story! I was reminded of seeing Paul Potts and Susan Boyle on Britain's…


Avatar
4

Endure and Sing

Your story inspired me to keep going no matter how discouraging it gets. At times…


Avatar
4

Endure and Sing

Thank you so much for the feedback! I pray that the young readers will be…


Avatar
4

Endure and Sing

Thank you for taking the time to comment and convey your thoughts on the story.…


Avatar
4

Endure and Sing

Hi Katy, don't we all feel like the rat in your story at times! We…


Avatar
4

Vows

I must admit it was the picture of the church, with its grave yard, under…


Avatar
3

Between Belonging and Dying

A very powerful story, Daniel. Your writing makes it easy to feel the reality of…


Avatar
3

Between Belonging and Dying

Oh my gosh, Daniel. Your story really defines the word superb. You make me experience…


Avatar
3

Between Belonging and Dying

A horrendous situation, more so because so many people find themselves going through it. A…


Avatar
3

Between Belonging and Dying

What an extremely powerful story Daniel, really well written and with an ending that had…


Avatar
3

Between Belonging and Dying

Daniel, this story is one of the best flash fiction stories I've ever read. You…


Avatar
3

In Memoriam

It's terrible to lose someone you love and accept that he is not a part…


Avatar
3

The Problem with Women

I think Carrie has said it all. We rest our collective case.  ? 


Recent Comments






www.Voice.club

Upcoming Site
Maintenance
Scheduled for Today @ 8:45am ET

USA Timezone – Eastern Time – (GMT-5)

Days
Hours
Minutes
Seconds


Voice-Team will perform upgrades and add new features!

During our scheduled maintenance
Voice.club will be inaccessible

13
0
Selected Authors may submit comments (5 Credits)x
()
x
Scroll to Top

Sharing a Post

Why do my friends need to SignIn to read the post I shared?

Actually, this is a voting security feature. During public voting, only club members can read posts submitted for that contest. Since anyone reading the story is able to vote (click the Like button), we reserve these capabilities to members who SignIn. Before we implemented this security feature, people were voting multiple times and making the public voting process unfair and out of balance. To fix this, our staff finally decided to allow only members who SignIn to read the stories. Membership is free and easy, and ensures our club is safe, secure, and family-friendly!