
The Bird
He sat on the chimney for three days, watching… watching…
Occasionally he let out an ominous caw sending shivers along my spine, and his piercing eyes followed whenever I braved the yard.
Reminded of Hitchcock’s The Birds, a film I’d never been able to watch to completion, I scanned yard and sky for more bird life but not a single sparrow, robin or pigeon could be seen or heard since the arrival of the huge black crow. Not even the tiny finches who usually flitted through the surrounding parkland, brightening even the dullest days.
Early on the fourth morning, I ventured outside on the premise of depositing vegetable peelings into my compost bin. I casually looked towards the aerial as I turned to go back inside, my breath held tight, hoping he’d have flown during the night. But those shrewd eyes mocked me, as if to say ‘I know you’re looking for me.’
Back inside I held my coffee mug with shaky hands, and again mentally audited my list of elderly relatives, friends and acquaintances, neighbours and my newly-licenced teenager whose car of choice was much too powerful in my opinion. Surely, this dark harbinger of doom was a sign of impending calamity.
The weatherman, courtesy of News-at-Six, predicted sunny days but grey clouds covered the sky with no hint of sun peeping through.
Showered and dressed, I set off for work, a fifteen-minute walk.
He watched as the gate squeaked shut. I let out a sigh, glad I’d escape his presence for a few hours.
Alas, I reached the grey brick house on the corner, looked up and saw him leering smugly from the top of the high-pitched roof.
I marched on. He flew from roof-top to roof-top. I quickened my steps. He flew faster. I paused at the red traffic light, he perched directly above.
On the green signal I set off again, my feet tripping over each other until…
That foreboding feathered vertebrate landed atop the electricity pole, sizzled and landed on the ground in front of me… burnt to a crisp.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleSandra, this is so scary! Unlike you, I have watched Hitchcock’s “The Birds” in its entirety, and it is truly terrifying. Your story had me on the edge of my seat, and the end was unexpected and fun. I won’t give it away for those who haven’t read the story, but I thoroughly enjoyed this story. Your photo was perfect too, by the way. So Halloweeny!
Thank you, Fuji. Some years ago, I met my parents and youngest son in an outer Melbourne suburb for lunch. (I live north of the city, they are east – a good meeting point!) After lunch we went for a walk, including a stroll through a retirement village. My son and I noticed a large crow making himself heard on the top of one roof and both came to the same scary… Read more »
Loved this Sandra! The end was deliciously unexpected as I was imagining this bird stalking the human with intent but it was the one ending stalked. I enjoyed the description of mundane activities while the fear beats a crescendo…
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you, Greene. I love birds but do find it difficult to like crows! Fortunately, we don’t have a lot here but at my former home they would race me to steal the eggs when my hens started cackling and kill baby ducklings and chickens. I was always watching, ready to chase them away. This time I turned the tables 🙂
Sandra, the suspense in your story is pitched perfectly and is paced so well that you are compelled to read to the end… and then that marvellous twist. Such fun, loved it!
Thank you, Carrie. I didn’t have the ending planned when I started, just that awful crow sitting on the roof and watching, but as it developed the ending came 🙂
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleSandra, I loved the end to this suspenseful tale! Nice work! I’m a huge fan of “The Raven” by Edgar Allen Poe and you definitely captured the essence of a creepy, meddlesome crow!
Thanks, Heather. As I went outside this morning to feed my hens, a small flock of crows flew over literally ‘crowing’ and making their presence heard. I smiled smugly thinking of this one’s demise 🙂 What fun we can have with words 🙂
I haven’t watched Hitchcock’s, “The Birds”, but I want to say this story is indeed scary. Thank God the trailer was finally toasted. Did it truly happen?
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThank you, Thompson. It didn’t really happen but I did once see a crow sitting on a roof in a retirement village and it gave me the creeps. I can only image how scary it would be for the elderly residents! I had that image in mind when I started writing and I think it was a little revenge on all the crows who used to steal my hen’s eggs and kill… Read more »
Hello Sandra
The forbodings are scary and the ending is justified.
Thanks, Dipayan!
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Oh, Sandra. I love it so much. My hair stood on end, and the picture was also scary. Fortunately, the ending made me laugh. Awesome twist. Poor crow. It was burned and roasted.
Thank you very much, Lotchie! I do find crows creepy and I couldn’t resist giving him the end he deserved 🙂
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleYou’re welcome, Sandra. Well done.
Great suspense and great end!!! Your story got me all along.