Baby sat in her chair staring with the bluest eyes.

Her eyes were cerulean blue, the bluest. She stared with those cerulean eyes. She stared with the bluest eyes. They stood out against her delicate sculptured face which was an envious rose hue. Her lips were perfect, a flawless symmetrical red rosebud of a near smile. Her nose was delicate, ideally balanced, shaped and formed. Such a nose on an adult would have been the envy of many a female. Around her perfectly formed features was a halo of delicate blonde curls, always styled flawlessly. There was never a single strand of hair out of place. Her ears too, were small and delicate, like pure buds on a plant. Mother viewed her as a paragon of pure perfection. 

Mother entered the room, a bustle and rustle of antique lace, culture and gentility. Her long elegant train glided over the carpet with a refined whisper.  

Naturally, her mother fussed over her in a fastidious way, “My darling baby, how are you today? Neither too hot nor too cold, I hope. There’s a subtle freshness in the air, you must have another blanket.”  Going to the linen closet, the mother took out the softest loveliest pinkest blanket- one of many. She delicately and lovingly wrapped it around Baby. “Darling, how the pink brings out the subtleties of your blue eyes. Surf blue.” 

Baby stared with the bluest eyes.

The Mother left the room, quietly blowing a loving kiss to Baby. She closed the door with absolute care and precision. Not a sound was heard. The Mother could not abide noise of any description. The maids regarded her as a tyrant with her demands for silence and that certain parts of the house were most definitely off limits to them.   

Mother entered the room. Mother left the room. No one else entered. 

Mother smiled, “Baby you are so lovely!”

Baby stared with the bluest eyes. She stared with glass eyes in a porcelain face on a porcelain body. 

0 0 votes
Post Rating
Comments without a personalized avatar will not be published.
11 Comments
Oldest
Newest Most Voted
Inline Feedbacks
View all comments
Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary (@carrie-oleary)
6 months ago

Mother truly did love her baby, Margarida. The twist at the end of the story made me feel quite sad for her. It made me wonder if the maids knew what was going on? Well done

Melissa Taggart
Melissa Taggart (@melissa-taggart)
6 months ago
Reply to  Carrie OLeary

I agree with what you just said, Carrie. I was about to post something similar but you worded it best. ?  I also wondered if the maids knew what was going on.

This is a great story, Margarida!

Julie Harris
Julie Harris (@julie-harris)
6 months ago

This is a very touching story, Margarida. I do think we can learn about love in a myriad of ways, not just with other human beings. I feel great compassion for the Mother. There could be dozens of reasons why she doesn’t have other humans to love. And maybe the maids know her well enough to also feel compassion for her. A story that makes the reader think, and explore his/her own experiences with love. Excellent writing!

Comments without a personalized avatar will not be published.
Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
6 months ago

Oh, Margarida. I was so moved and touched by your story. A mother’s love is priceless and boundless. Well done.

Linda Rock
Linda Rock (@linda-rock)
6 months ago

Your story certainly raises many questions Margarida. My take on it is that the poor mother has lost her own baby but her mind is unable to accept it. As for the reason she demands silence, could it be because she was unable to save her baby because she didn’t hear her cries? I could be totally wrong but your story has my imagination in overdrive! Beautifully written and one that keeps you guessing. As an aside, my mother was once employed in a doll factory. It was just after the end of the war and she was tasked with painting the dolls rosebud lips.

Comments without a personalized avatar will not be published.
Susan Dawson
Susan Dawson (@susan-dawson)
5 months ago

A good story with a lovely composition to it. I have just looked up some pictures of the modern day hyperrealistic dolls that people collect, and that is in addition to their uses in care homes. One thing I notice is that even without the hard porcelain their ‘bluest eyes’ still stare!

Become a PatronHelp support our family-friendly mission

Most Voted Comments

Avatar
8

Bait

It takes a real talent to tell a story in so few words. What was…


Avatar
6

Endure and Sing

Inspirational piece. Am glad you picked the rat to be the protagonist in your story,…


Avatar
6

Endure and Sing

Such a sweet tale - and with a good moral to the story. I thought…


Avatar
5

Endure and Sing

Wow! This is a good story! Really good to read to little kids, the moral…


Avatar
4

Endure and Sing

Hi Katy, it really does add an extra dimension to hear your story read aloud…


Avatar
4

Endure and Sing

In my neighboring country Denmark, we have the classical storyteller Hans-Christian Andersen. Your sweet story…


Avatar
4

Endure and Sing

A really nice one with a wonderful story line. I can see why this was…


Avatar
4

Endure and Sing

A beautiful story! I was reminded of seeing Paul Potts and Susan Boyle on Britain's…


Avatar
4

Endure and Sing

Your story inspired me to keep going no matter how discouraging it gets. At times…


Avatar
4

Endure and Sing

Thank you so much for the feedback! I pray that the young readers will be…


Avatar
4

Endure and Sing

Thank you for taking the time to comment and convey your thoughts on the story.…


Avatar
4

Endure and Sing

Hi Katy, don't we all feel like the rat in your story at times! We…


Avatar
4

Vows

I must admit it was the picture of the church, with its grave yard, under…


Avatar
3

Between Belonging and Dying

A very powerful story, Daniel. Your writing makes it easy to feel the reality of…


Avatar
3

Between Belonging and Dying

Oh my gosh, Daniel. Your story really defines the word superb. You make me experience…


Avatar
3

Between Belonging and Dying

A horrendous situation, more so because so many people find themselves going through it. A…


Avatar
3

Between Belonging and Dying

What an extremely powerful story Daniel, really well written and with an ending that had…


Avatar
3

Between Belonging and Dying

Daniel, this story is one of the best flash fiction stories I've ever read. You…


Avatar
3

In Memoriam

It's terrible to lose someone you love and accept that he is not a part…


Avatar
3

The Problem with Women

I think Carrie has said it all. We rest our collective case.  ? 


Recent Comments


www.Voice.club

Upcoming Site
Maintenance
Scheduled for Today @ 8:45am ET

USA Timezone – Eastern Time – (GMT-5)

Days
Hours
Minutes
Seconds


Voice-Team will perform upgrades and add new features!

During our scheduled maintenance
Voice.club will be inaccessible

11
0
Selected Authors may submit comments (5 Credits)x
()
x
Scroll to Top

Sharing a Post

Why do my friends need to SignIn to read the post I shared?

Actually, this is a voting security feature. During public voting, only club members can read posts submitted for that contest. Since anyone reading the story is able to vote (click the Like button), we reserve these capabilities to members who SignIn. Before we implemented this security feature, people were voting multiple times and making the public voting process unfair and out of balance. To fix this, our staff finally decided to allow only members who SignIn to read the stories. Membership is free and easy, and ensures our club is safe, secure, and family-friendly!