I step through the gates and into the human world, my heart almost splintering at the tableau before me, my own memories unbearably flooding back. I look at the mother, with a tiny baby in her arms and remember my own daughter, wrapped snugly in a blanket, one tiny hand tucked under her chin. She’d died, silent in my arms, as I stroked the downy hair on her forehead. She’d been my greatest gift, but one I’d had for such a very short time.

I come back to the present, taking in the fullness of the scene. Mum sits, lovingly rocking the baby. Dad crouches on the floor at her side. A priest stands, whispering silent prayers. There are three doctors in the room with them, making the space confined, and far too public for the palpable grief.

“I’m turning off her life support now. I don’t expect it will take long.”

Mum emits a sob and a single tear slides down her cheek to the corner of her mouth. She catches it with the tip of her tongue, swallowing it down as if to keep all her despair inside.

I quickly cross the room, knowing that no one other than the child will either see or feel my presence. As the doctor flicks the switches off and the monitor emits a continuous beep, I press my lips to baby’s, blue-tinged as her oxygen depletes. There’s a momentary silence, then a single beep, followed by another and another as the child grasps for a tentative hold on life. 

She isn’t out of the woods yet but she has a fighting chance. We belong to each other now and I will help her to live. She has to – she has an important role to play later on in life.

Pride swells within me. Hope fills the room. My first step as Guardian is complete. 

I stand back as the priest stoops to pick up a single white feather from the floor, glowing with a faint iridescence. He looks around, knowing he’s witnessed a miracle and tucks it safely into his Bible.

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4 months ago

A very enjoyable story. From the step “into the human world” to the single feather “glowing with a faint iridescence”, the descriptions centered the reader to the beauty and wonder of life.

Paul Lewthwaite
Paul Lewthwaite(@paul-lewthwaite)
5 months ago

A very powerful piece, Carrie. I liked the guardian angel theme and very neatly described scene, which echoes Jesus and the three wise men etc, except this time set in modern days. Did I pick that up correctly? Anyway, strong, emotional read.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
5 months ago

Wow. It is a stunning story of the guardian angel and miracles. As I read it, my heart seemed to be filled with hope, and belief overflowed with joy. I am a woman who believes deeply in God and his miracles. Superb story with a healing touch and a divine power. 

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Thompson Emate
Thompson Emate(@thompson-emate)
5 months ago

I love this story. It’s full of hope and life. It passes for a short Christian story. It’s so good to see your versatility, Carrie. I know you to be very good at stories with dark and mystery themes. This is exceptional. Good job.

Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
5 months ago

An extremely moving story Carrie. A combination of sadness and hope. I’m also left wondering about the important part, later in life, that this tiny baby is destined to play. I tend to think you have plans to take this story further. If so, this is certainly a brilliant opening and, as always, very well written.

Greene M Wills
Greene M Wills(@greene-m-wills)
5 months ago

What a lovely story, Carrie, an absolute tribute to hope and rebirth! I just feel the emotion and the pride the new guardian angel feels, while helping the baby breathe again… capital writing!

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Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse(@marianna-pieterse)
5 months ago

Carrie, your story gave me goosebumps! Wow! The Guardian Angel’s attentiveness really added to the tension in the story. It was so beautifully written and I love the ending! Well done.

Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse(@marianna-pieterse)
5 months ago
Reply to  Carrie OLeary

I hope you will expand on this one!

Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
5 months ago

A wonderful piece of writing, Carrie. The scene you describe is very serene and full of hopeful vibration. I wonder what it is the angel knows about the baby’s future. Do you have any idea?

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Daniel Onchoka
Daniel Onchoka(@daniel-onchoka)
4 months ago

Beautiful. Simply beautiful. A feather to wipe away a tear. Hope at the end of hope. Life at the end of life, thus its beginning. With all its possibilities.

Orlando Sanchez
Orlando Sanchez(@orlando-sanchez)
4 months ago

Fantastic story! Moving and powerful left me wanting to hear more of the life just starting!

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