Conch shells blew as the new bride stepped in, leaving her red dyed footprints on the floor. After completing the rituals, she was ushered into her bedroom. The new furniture had been set. The lavender walls reminded her of how she drove her cousin crazy trying to select matching bed clothes. She had painstakingly selected the colour of the walls, the lampshades and the artefacts. But what she loved most was the long and spacious sun-kissed balcony.

“What is the carpet area? How many bedrooms do you have? Which year was the building constructed?” The surveyor from the bank was rattling off. Piya was startled out of her reverie. The buyer was standing behind. This was a customary survey before the final disbursement of housing loan. The agreement is done, registration is due soon.

The lavender walls and starry ceiling had witnessed many a tearful night when she cried inconsolably after her miscarriage. The lavender was later replaced by cream and texture but the starry ceiling stayed on to rejoice in the babbling of her infant. The 1300 square feet seemed too small after returning from a different city after a hiatus of a few years, having grown used to a more affluent lifestyle. But it always stood by her through so many tempests of her life. It provided shelter to her paralysed mother. It watched her getting back to work after what seemed to be a permanent end to her career.

The flat shared many joyous moments too. The rice ceremony, the crawling, the baby steps, the birthdays. The balcony was her green nook, a home to birds and bees. She spent countless lazy afternoons there, with a storybook in hand, soaking up the winter sun. It regaled her on summer evenings; it dried her clothes.

“See you on 31st.” The lady smiled as she took her leave. Piya was unsettled. Something tugged at her heart strings. “This is no longer my home,” she sobbed as she closed the door behind them. Severing the bond of fifteen years of belonging is more painful than she had imagined.

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Chris
Chris (@chris)
4 months ago

Hi Piyali – This story is touching, and I also really liked the picture. Look forward to reading more of your stories!

Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary (@carrie-oleary)
4 months ago

Hi Piyali. I did wonder as I was reading if the story was based on real events. I think leaving anywhere that you have called home can be a real tug at the heartstrings. Hope you settle quickly into your new home

Linda Rock
Linda Rock (@linda-rock)
4 months ago

Your story reminded me so much of the moves I’ve made Piyali. Looking around, one last time, what was once home before closing the door on the memories it holds. All those memories you made in that flat are played out so well in your writing, the happy and sad times interspersed together; a true reflection of life. And I feel your heartache so acutely at the reality of leaving. A well written and emotional read.

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Linda Rock
Linda Rock (@linda-rock)
4 months ago
Reply to  Piyali Ganguli

Piyali, you are too kind and I hope you realise how very talented a writer you are.

krishnendu banerjee
krishnendu banerjee (@krishnendu-banerjee1)
4 months ago

Lovely one Piyali. We could relate to it so much having gone through it a few weeks ago.

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anindita saha
anindita saha (@anindita-saha)
4 months ago

Really heart aching, Piyali, beautifully narrated

Nishu Kumbhat
Nishu Kumbhat (@nishu-kumbhat)
4 months ago

Beautifully written! A woman’s agony at leaving her home,where she has established deep bonds and precious memories is expressed with sincerity.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
4 months ago

Hello, Piyali. This story of yours is very touching and tearful. And I like the title. Thank you for the new word, “Adieu”, I learned something new.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
4 months ago
Reply to  Piyali Ganguli

You’re welcome, Piyali.

Sandra OReilly
Sandra OReilly (@sandra-oreilly)
4 months ago

Hi Piyali beautiful, expressive story I loved it well done. I too am new and learning so much,

Mahua Bose
Mahua Bose (@mahua-bose)
4 months ago

Beautiful story Piyali! Enjoyed thoroughly ????

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Archisman Banerjee
Archisman Banerjee (@archisman-banerjee)
4 months ago

An intriguing tale of conventional patriarchy and feminine problems in Indian cultural marriage. Loved the way of narration ma’am. It absolutely justifies the statement “women have to go through a lot of things”

Rajshree Chatterjee
Rajshree Chatterjee (@rajshree-chatterjee)
4 months ago

Loved your story Piyali. Its so touching, I could relate to it so well.Though personal, it attains a universal note at the end.Just fantastic dear.

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Jaideep Bose
Jaideep Bose (@jaideep-bose)
4 months ago

Very well done and enjoyed reading this ????

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anindita saha
anindita saha (@anindita-saha)
4 months ago

Really heart aching Piyali, beautifully narrated.

Subhashis Das
Subhashis Das (@subhashis-das)
3 months ago

One who knows, knows what it means. A long journey of life crafted beautifully in limited words. Amazing.

Thompson Emate
Thompson Emate (@thompson-emate)
3 months ago

Wow! Piyali, this is a good and interesting story. It’s like watching a movie. Although I’m not attached to places, I could be to people.

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Anwesha
Anwesha (@anwesha)
3 months ago

This story unravels like a brilliant montage scene. The subtle use of imagery and symbolism brings a whole new layer to the narrative.

namrata acharya
namrata acharya (@namrata-acharya)
3 months ago

What a beautiful narration! A heart touching story everyone can relate to. Thank you Piyali for penning this. Loved reading it!

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Damayanti Sikder
Damayanti Sikder (@damayanti-sikder)
3 months ago

Fantabulous!

Greene M Wills
Greene M Wills (@greene-m-wills)
3 months ago

So simple and so heartrending! How difficult is to leave what you know and love… Your story brought back many memories for me, Piyali! I love the bittersweet feeling pervading your writing, well done!!

Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse (@marianna-pieterse)
3 months ago

Piyali, this is a very relatable, touching story. It can be so hard to leave a home behind where there are so many happy and sad memories. There is the excitement of the new house, but also everything that you leave behind, a bittersweet moment.
I read your comment that this is based on your own life story. I wish you all the best with your move and hope that you will settle in quickly and will make many happy memories in your new home!

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Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse (@marianna-pieterse)
3 months ago
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You are most welcome, Piyali!  

Fuji
Fuji (@fuji)
3 months ago

Congratulations on your win Piyali, and for all the lovely comments you received. How nice to know that so many people are reading your story and relating to it!

Greene M Wills
Greene M Wills (@greene-m-wills)
3 months ago

I am very happy for you, Piyali!! Your story so simple and poignant struck a chord in the soul, well done!!

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
3 months ago

Congratulations, Piyali. I am happy about your achievement. 

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
3 months ago
Reply to  Piyali Ganguli

You’re most welcome, Piyali.

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