Adieu
Conch shells blew as the new bride stepped in, leaving her red dyed footprints on the floor. After completing the rituals, she was ushered into her bedroom. The new furniture had been set. The lavender walls reminded her of how she drove her cousin crazy trying to select matching bed clothes. She had painstakingly selected the colour of the walls, the lampshades and the artefacts. But what she loved most was the long and spacious sun-kissed balcony.
“What is the carpet area? How many bedrooms do you have? Which year was the building constructed?” The surveyor from the bank was rattling off. Piya was startled out of her reverie. The buyer was standing behind. This was a customary survey before the final disbursement of housing loan. The agreement is done, registration is due soon.
The lavender walls and starry ceiling had witnessed many a tearful night when she cried inconsolably after her miscarriage. The lavender was later replaced by cream and texture but the starry ceiling stayed on to rejoice in the babbling of her infant. The 1300 square feet seemed too small after returning from a different city after a hiatus of a few years, having grown used to a more affluent lifestyle. But it always stood by her through so many tempests of her life. It provided shelter to her paralysed mother. It watched her getting back to work after what seemed to be a permanent end to her career.
The flat shared many joyous moments too. The rice ceremony, the crawling, the baby steps, the birthdays. The balcony was her green nook, a home to birds and bees. She spent countless lazy afternoons there, with a storybook in hand, soaking up the winter sun. It regaled her on summer evenings; it dried her clothes.
“See you on 31st.” The lady smiled as she took her leave. Piya was unsettled. Something tugged at her heart strings. “This is no longer my home,” she sobbed as she closed the door behind them. Severing the bond of fifteen years of belonging is more painful than she had imagined.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleHi Piyali – This story is touching, and I also really liked the picture. Look forward to reading more of your stories!
Thanx Chris. It is not a fiction, it is actually a story of my life. I am presently undergoing this pain of separation. I have to move out of this flat on the 31st of this month. We are moving into a bigger house, a house actually, not a flat. Still my heart aches for this one.
Hi Piyali. I did wonder as I was reading if the story was based on real events. I think leaving anywhere that you have called home can be a real tug at the heartstrings. Hope you settle quickly into your new home
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleYes Carrie, it is very painful. Anyway, thank you so much for your good wishes ????
Your story reminded me so much of the moves I’ve made Piyali. Looking around, one last time, what was once home before closing the door on the memories it holds. All those memories you made in that flat are played out so well in your writing, the happy and sad times interspersed together; a true reflection of life. And I feel your heartache so acutely at the reality of leaving. A well… Read more »
Thank you so much Linda. Feels so good coming from such a fantastic writer like you.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GooglePiyali, you are too kind and I hope you realise how very talented a writer you are.
I am really in awe of all of you. Every one of you write so well. Thank God, I found this platform. I have so much to learn from all of you. And thank you once again for your words of encouragement.
Lovely one Piyali. We could relate to it so much having gone through it a few weeks ago.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleYes, this is very much relatable. We all go through the same at some point or the other.
Really heart aching, Piyali, beautifully narrated
Beautifully written! A woman’s agony at leaving her home,where she has established deep bonds and precious memories is expressed with sincerity.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThanx Nishu. Means a lot for an amateur.
Hello, Piyali. This story of yours is very touching and tearful. And I like the title. Thank you for the new word, “Adieu”, I learned something new.
Thanx Lotchie. I am a greenhorn and I am learning so much from you all. All of you are such brilliant writers.
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Hi Piyali beautiful, expressive story I loved it well done. I too am new and learning so much,
Thank you so much Sandra. Yours is far better than mine ????
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleBeautiful story Piyali! Enjoyed thoroughly ????
Thank you so much.
An intriguing tale of conventional patriarchy and feminine problems in Indian cultural marriage. Loved the way of narration ma’am. It absolutely justifies the statement “women have to go through a lot of things”
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Loved your story Piyali. Its so touching, I could relate to it so well.Though personal, it attains a universal note at the end.Just fantastic dear.
Thank you so much.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleVery well done and enjoyed reading this ????
Thank you so much.
Really heart aching Piyali, beautifully narrated.
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One who knows, knows what it means. A long journey of life crafted beautifully in limited words. Amazing.
Wow! Piyali, this is a good and interesting story. It’s like watching a movie. Although I’m not attached to places, I could be to people.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleThanks Thompson for your appreciation. Good that you are not attached to places. The less the attachment, the better. Less painful ????
This story unravels like a brilliant montage scene. The subtle use of imagery and symbolism brings a whole new layer to the narrative.
Beautiful appreciation Anwesha. Thank you.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleWhat a beautiful narration! A heart touching story everyone can relate to. Thank you Piyali for penning this. Loved reading it!
Thank you Namrata. Means a lot coming from an award winning journalist like you.
Fantabulous!
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So simple and so heartrending! How difficult is to leave what you know and love… Your story brought back many memories for me, Piyali! I love the bittersweet feeling pervading your writing, well done!!
Thank you Greene. I am considered an emotional fool. I get attached to people and things very easily. Glad to know that so many of you share the same emotions as I do!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GooglePiyali, this is a very relatable, touching story. It can be so hard to leave a home behind where there are so many happy and sad memories. There is the excitement of the new house, but also everything that you leave behind, a bittersweet moment. I read your comment that this is based on your own life story. I wish you all the best with your move and hope that you will… Read more »
Thank you Marianna for your wishes. Am really touched.
You are most welcome, Piyali!
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleCongratulations on your win Piyali, and for all the lovely comments you received. How nice to know that so many people are reading your story and relating to it!
Thanks Fuji. Means a lot coming from you.
I am very happy for you, Piyali!! Your story so simple and poignant struck a chord in the soul, well done!!
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Congratulations, Piyali. I am happy about your achievement.
Thank you Lotchie.
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To Leave Comments - Please SignIn with GoogleYou’re most welcome, Piyali.