In every green forest a cabin can be found. In every cabin there’s a wood stove. In every stove there’s ash. In every ash pile there are bones. In every bone there’s a story. In every story there’s a voice. In every voice there is hope. In every hope there’s a cost. In every cost there’s a cut. In every cut there’s a ghost. In every ghost there is a home. In every home there’s a witch. In every witch there is a girl. In every girl a green forest can be found.

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1 month ago

This tight exercise in the logic of matryoshka doll — or a sort of verbal palindrome — is full of surprises: “hope” becoming “cost,” “cost” becoming “cut,” “cut” becoming “ghost.” The final line might be even better with a bit of compression to produce modulation and climax: “In every girl, a forest.” This is a provocative, realm-encircling koan. 

Margarida Brei
Margarida Brei (@margarida-brei)
3 months ago

Immensely clever writing, Melissa. Is this an example of cumulative writing?

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
3 months ago

Excellent writing. I adore its simplicity, but the impact is strong. Every word stuck in my mind. A very clever way of writing. Good job, Melissa. 

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
2 months ago

You’re welcome, Melissa

Sandra OReilly
Sandra OReilly (@sandra-oreilly)
3 months ago

Loved this Melissa – it was so thought provoking and unusual. Every word seems to resonate.

Fuji
Fuji (@fuji)
2 months ago

Really delightful, Melissa! It stays with the reader for a long time, like a proverb. I’ve read it many times now, and enjoy it just as much each time. Great writing!

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Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof (@christer-norrlof)
2 months ago

I love the enigmatic, philosophical Ariadne- thread we are invited to follow in your story, Melissa. I had a feeling from the beginning that we would end up where we started in the maze, but some of the jumps were still surprising and thought provoking. Very well done!

Julie Harris
Julie Harris (@julie-harris)
1 month ago

I loved this parable-story, Melissa. Some of the connections are elusive – like hope-cost-cut-ghost, but that elusiveness makes it all the more intriguing. I like this style of writing!

Julie Harris
Julie Harris (@julie-harris)
1 month ago

Huge congratulations, Melissa! I love the fact that you were experimenting with something new and different and it was so well-received. Great story.

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Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof (@christer-norrlof)
1 month ago

Congratulations, Melissa! I love your thought provoking story.

Linda Rock
Linda Rock (@linda-rock)
1 month ago

I agree with Julie, Melissa, well done on trying something new. It certainly paid off! Congratulations on your win.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
1 month ago

Congratulations, Melissa.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
1 month ago

You’re welcome.

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