In every green forest a cabin can be found. In every cabin there’s a wood stove. In every stove there’s ash. In every ash pile there are bones. In every bone there’s a story. In every story there’s a voice. In every voice there is hope. In every hope there’s a cost. In every cost there’s a cut. In every cut there’s a ghost. In every ghost there is a home. In every home there’s a witch. In every witch there is a girl. In every girl a green forest can be found.

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Voice-Team
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5 months ago

This tight exercise in the logic of matryoshka doll — or a sort of verbal palindrome — is full of surprises: “hope” becoming “cost,” “cost” becoming “cut,” “cut” becoming “ghost.” The final line might be even better with a bit of compression to produce modulation and climax: “In every girl, a forest.” This is a provocative, realm-encircling koan. 

Margarida Brei
Margarida Brei(@margarida-brei)
7 months ago

Immensely clever writing, Melissa. Is this an example of cumulative writing?

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
7 months ago

Excellent writing. I adore its simplicity, but the impact is strong. Every word stuck in my mind. A very clever way of writing. Good job, Melissa. 

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
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6 months ago

You’re welcome, Melissa

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Sandra OReilly
Sandra OReilly(@sandra-oreilly)
7 months ago

Loved this Melissa – it was so thought provoking and unusual. Every word seems to resonate.

Fuji
Fuji(@fuji)
6 months ago

Really delightful, Melissa! It stays with the reader for a long time, like a proverb. I’ve read it many times now, and enjoy it just as much each time. Great writing!

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Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
6 months ago

I love the enigmatic, philosophical Ariadne- thread we are invited to follow in your story, Melissa. I had a feeling from the beginning that we would end up where we started in the maze, but some of the jumps were still surprising and thought provoking. Very well done!

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Julie Harris
Julie Harris(@julie-harris)
5 months ago

I loved this parable-story, Melissa. Some of the connections are elusive – like hope-cost-cut-ghost, but that elusiveness makes it all the more intriguing. I like this style of writing!

Julie Harris
Julie Harris(@julie-harris)
5 months ago

Huge congratulations, Melissa! I love the fact that you were experimenting with something new and different and it was so well-received. Great story.

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Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
5 months ago

Congratulations, Melissa! I love your thought provoking story.

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Linda Rock
Linda Rock(@linda-rock)
5 months ago

I agree with Julie, Melissa, well done on trying something new. It certainly paid off! Congratulations on your win.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
5 months ago

Congratulations, Melissa.

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
Reply to  Melissa Taggart
5 months ago

You’re welcome.

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