The Magic Moment
With the Prince close on her heels, she was hurriedly climbing down the stairs. She tripped. But instead of falling headlong, she landed in the arms of the Prince. Cinderella heard the palace clock strike twelve. The look of disbelief in his eyes told her that the magic was over, just as it was supposed to be. The Prince was dumbstruck. A moment earlier he was holding a beautiful princess in a blue satin gown in his arms and in a jiffy he was staring into the face of a woman wearing a plain housemaid’s dress. The innocence in those liquid eyes was unmistakable, though.
“Hey, who are you?” the Prince quizzed. “Look, let me make this very clear.” Cinderella was unabashedly frank. “I just wanted to visit the palace and this was my only opportunity. I never intended to deceive anybody.” “Of course, you deceived everyone. You pretended to be someone that you are not.” “Would your guards have allowed a woman in an ordinary dress inside the palace?” The Prince really had no answer. He could not help but admire her honesty. He was already bewitched by her beauty and now he was falling more helplessly in love. She was indeed his ideal partner, his future Queen.
“You don’t have to go back to your stepmother. Stay with us, in the palace.” “Is this some kind of a joke?” Cinderella snapped at the Prince. “No dear, I want to marry you. You would be the future Queen of this kingdom. It’s good that the magic wore off at the right time or else I would have never known the real you. And it also spared me the ordeal of trying to find you,” the Prince added in good humour. “I would have to go now, but I would wait for the moment when you come asking for my hand with due honour.” Saying this, Cinderella walked along the gravel path leading to the imposing main gate. This time she was in no hurry. Time was on her side.
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I like your story within a story Piyali. It reminded me of Gregory Maguire’s novels.
Thank you Margarida for your generous comment. Truly humbled.
I love your version of the Cinderella story. I really enjoyed it. Nicely done, Piyali.
Thank you Lotchie. Means a lot.
You’re welcome and congratulations.
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Awww.. I love this version of Cinderella so much, the prince is a sweetheart as well.. very well portrayed!!????
Yes, this is an interesting version of an old story. I agree with you, it is well portrayed. Hope you will also submit a story Debleena, we look forward to reading yours also!
Yes, I wanted a new age Cinderella, someone who is the master of her own destiny.
I enjoyed reading the thought process of Cinderella….this makes her so much of a flesh and blood character and not just a fairy tale heroine.
Hi Nishu – I agree, as you said “this makes her so much of a flesh and blood character and not just a fairy tale heroine” – I also thought this makes her character more realistic.
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Thanx Chris. I am glad that you liked it.
That is exactly what I wanted. Thanks Nishu for liking it.
Piyali! Beautiful story. Enjoyed it.
Thank you.
Excellent. A new, empowered Cinderella, I must say!
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Yes, all women should be empowered. Life is no fairy tale. We must shape our own destiny.
Lovely! ❤
Thanks Dipanwita!
Thank you.
Lucid! Very spontaneous!
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Thanx for your appreciation. Means a lot.
I like your story…very nice and excellent.
Thank you.
Well articulated. Enjoyed the write up.
Thank you so much.
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I loved your story Piyali, beautifully portrayed. Thanks for sharing with me.
Coming from an accomplished writer like you, it really means a lot.
Loved It.
Thank you ????
Nice portrayal.
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Thank you so much.
Cinderella decoded…????
Was a bit sceptical whether people would like it.
Just loved it Piyali…in fact its honestly much better than the original version ….lots of love girl❤❤
Yes, I wanted a new age Cinderella, full of confidence and self-esteem.
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Loved your realistic version of the fairytale, Piyali! Also the character of a new-age Cinderella – down to earth and more in control of her destiny.
Yes, that is what I wanted. A girl who is in control of her destiny. Thank you so much for liking my Cinderella.
Beautifully written! Cinderella in a new avatar. Very well! ????????
Thank you so much!!!
Lovely. My daughters just named it – The amazing Cinderella part 2. (They have watched the amazing spider man 2 a few days ago 😉 )
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Special love and thanks for your amazing daughters ????
I really like your alternative ending to the most famous fairy tale of all times!! Honesty turned out to be the best policy for your Cinders!!
You know, I was a little sceptical in the beginning how people would take my twist in the fairy tale.