“It was a real pea-souper.  I’d decided to take the shortcut home from the cinema, through the park, and that’s when I heard it.  A loud thudding sound.  Emerging from the fog loomed a giant of a creature!  Radioactive green; tusks the size of an elephant’s!  I yelled!  But, to my surprise, it turned and ran.  I heard a crack and a howl… then silence.”

Jimmy viewed his grandad suspiciously.  “You’re making this up, aren’t you Grandad?”

Grandad smiled.  “Night Jimmy, sleep well.”

In his room, Grandad opened a dresser drawer and carefully took out a broken tusk.  Radioactive green.

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Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary (@carrie-oleary)
2 months ago

Ooh, interesting Linda. I’d love to know more about this one. Very intriguing.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
2 months ago

Your story is very intriguing, Linda. Hopefully, there is part 2 of this. And thanks for the new word to add to my vocabulary, “pea-souper.” 

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
2 months ago
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Oh, thanks to God. You’re welcome, Linda. I do also appreciate your kind words to me.

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Margarida Brei
Margarida Brei (@margarida-brei)
2 months ago

Very curious story Linda, but what happens next?

Fuji
Fuji (@fuji)
2 months ago

I love this story, Linda. I don’t think it needs any further elaboration or explanation. It is a little gem, complete within itself. Your stories are always a treat to read.

Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof (@christer-norrlof)
2 months ago

I agree with you that this story is complete without any continuation, Linda. There are a couple of nice twists in it, Grandpa has his little secret and his grandson is left with his question and his imagination about what might have happened. Open-ended stories often serve very well.

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Allan Neil
Allan Neil (@allan-neil)
1 month ago

Perfect Grandpa. Lovely jolting twist. Remarkable with such a short build-up. I read it 3 times and was still chuckling after the third.

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