Wind swirls above me whispering its secrets to the world and making each leaf tremble delicately as they echo the song. I close my eyes and listen to the symphony above my head as I lay back with sunshine playing across my closed eyelids.  

Footsteps in the grass alert me to a visitor. The light reflects off his hair and brightens his eyes – one green and one brown. He grins and pops open a container and offers it to me. I smile, choose my goodie, and lay back listening to the wind in the trees above me. 

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Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
6 months ago

Your story brings a nice feeling to me. And the pictures that formed in my mind are very cozy and peaceful. It’s really nice to live in a free and peaceful environment. Nice story.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo(@lotchie-carmelo)
Reply to  Olivia Rose
6 months ago

You’re most welcome, Olivia. Welcome to Voice club. I am looking forward to reading more stories from you. 

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Margarida Brei
Margarida Brei(@margarida-brei)
6 months ago

I love your inspiring picture of light shafting through a forest, Olivia. Did you take this marvellous photo yourself? Welcome to Voice.Club.

Heather C
Heather C(@heather-c)
6 months ago

The different colored eyes of your visitor was a nice surprise. Lovely imagery. You set the scene and it felt quite real…the way you described the friend popping open a picnic container of treats…just like a perfect Sunday afternoon interlude. Stated so simply and yet it created a vivid image. Nice work!

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Carrie OLeary
Carrie OLeary(@carrie-oleary)
6 months ago

Welcome to Voice.club Olivia. The imagery in your story is beautiful. I could picture myself as being there, feel the sun on my face, the wind in my hair – a nice reprieve from our awful wet winter weather. Your accompanying photograph is stunning too. Very nicely done, really looking forward to reading more of your stories 🙂

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Fuji
Fuji(@fuji)
6 months ago

A lovely example of really good micro fiction. One brief moment in time, captured with well-chosen words. I especially like the green and brown eyes of the friend. Somehow this detail makes the story even more memorable. Welcome to the club, Olivia. Oh yes, and how nice to know that you took the picture yourself! It’s beautiful.

Christer Norrlof
Christer Norrlof(@christer-norrlof)
6 months ago

Your story is like a photo of a precious moment, cut out from the flow of time, Olivia. It shows a happy and relaxed person, enjoying a beautiful piece of nature, like the one in your incredible picture.

Julie Harris
Julie Harris(@julie-harris)
5 months ago

This is very beautiful, Olivia – both the story and your photograph. I hope you will write more stories like this. We could all use peaceful moments.

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