These were dark times for the highlanders. Since Culloden, Angus McLeod had been one step ahead of Cumberland’s redcoats. Reaching Raasay had been impossible so he headed to his mother’s people, the Macdonalds of Keppoch.

Walking by Loch Morar, he noticed a glint in the water. Curious, he left his sword and boots at the lochside and waded out. Ripples broke the still waters – the wake of otters swimming below the surface perhaps?

He was thigh deep when he reached his target, the stones under his feet slick with algae. The sun slid behind a cloud as he leaned forwards, plunging his arm into the water.

Something snaked around his wrist and tugged; already off balance, he fell. He had the presence of mind to take a lungful of air before his head plunged underwater. His free hand dragged the loch-bed, his fingers snagging on the handle of a dagger, hand closing around it instinctively.

He turned, stunned to find himself gazing into startling blue eyes, a beautiful humanlike face surrounded by a mass of flowing hair. Her lithe body ended in a silver-scaled tail, swaying sinuously as she pulled him deeper.

He followed, captivated by her sensual smile, until a ray of sunshine blazed through the water, breaking the illusion – showing her for the sea-hag she truly was. Stringy hair surrounded a sallow-skinned face, with colourless eyes and a gaping maw filled with pointed, blackened teeth.

Angus struggled in her grasp, her clawed fingers tearing his skin. Desperate to breathe, bubbles escaped his lips. How long had he been underwater? One minute? Two… longer?

He remembered the dagger in his free hand, slashing it down her arm. She let out a silent shriek and released him. He desperately pushed for the surface and salvation.

As he dragged himself out of the water, he remembered the legend of the Morag, the loch monster said to appear only on the death of the laird. Had old Alexander Macdonald fallen at Culloden then?

He swept up his belongings, backing away as the Morag appeared, her gaze following him with a vindictive glare.

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2 months ago

Another well-researched story with historical and mythological references. Any of you who enjoy Scottish legends will love this one!

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Marianna Pieterse
Marianna Pieterse (@marianna-pieterse)
2 months ago

Carrie, this is a very captivating story! I am glad to read that Angus escaped that terrible ordeal. I must admit, I’ve never heard of Morag, the lake monster, but I looked it up. Are people just as fascinated by it as with Nessie? I remember visiting Scotland many years ago and the tour guide telling us how people would watch the loch day and night in the hope of seeing Nessie. It is fascinating and this was a very interesting story.

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Marianna Pieterse (@marianna-pieterse)
2 months ago
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Carrie, this is very interesting, thank you for the link.

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Fuji (@fuji)
2 months ago
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Hello Carrie – your comment notes are just as fascinating as the story itself! I love knowing the connection to Harry Potter and Hogwarts Lake. Scotland seems to be a never-ending source of fantastic legends and heroes … and Loch monsters!

Linda Rock
Linda Rock (@linda-rock)
2 months ago

Carrie, I so admire you for all the research you do to ensure your stories are accurate and, of course, rich with history. This one is brilliantly written, full of suspense and wonder. And even more intriguing that it is based on a true story. I was enthralled.

Julie Harris
Julie Harris (@julie-harris)
2 months ago

I love the Scottish legends and sea creatures. You’ve done an exceptional job with this one, Carrie. The depth of your knowledge and research and passion offer us readers quite a treat. The Scottish mists and lochs and grey skies are rich with ancient mysteries, as I experienced on my only visit to Scotland. I stayed for a long time on Iona, another Scottish place steeped in history.

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allinonefitness steven jenkins (@allinonefitness-steven-jenkins)
2 months ago

Another wonderful story. Beautifully written and exciting. Hats off, Carrie  ???? 

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
2 months ago

Hello, Carrie. Your talent and knowledge in writing are truly exceptional. I found it more suspenseful and exciting. It is so captivating. Hats off to you.

Lotchie Carmelo
Lotchie Carmelo (@lotchie-carmelo)
2 months ago
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You’re most welcome, Carrie.

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Henry Vinicio Valerio Madriz (@henry-vinicio-valerio-madriz)
2 months ago

Suspense ’till the end! Great story.

Greene M Wills
Greene M Wills (@greene-m-wills)
2 months ago

I love the feeling of the hero fighting the illusion, the siren’s song of a monster!
It would be interesting to see what the Morag will do to get her revenge…

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